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Simplicity is Bliss

May 16, 2009 14:24

Title: Simplicity is Bliss
Fandom: Original
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: some strong language
Summary: Sometimes, we overanalyze.
Notes: Written for the May week 2 challenge at brigits_flame, theme “morning glory.” I had a lot of trouble with this one, not going to lie. Also I think I overuse symmetrical endings. But that's just me.

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( On a perfectly ordinary Tuesday, Jonah found a bouquet of morning glories on his desk. )

original fiction, brigits_flame

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kuhori_rei May 19 2009, 15:18:12 UTC

Thank you! :)

anduial May 17 2009, 02:30:29 UTC

I liked this, and particularly I liked the character Gareth. :) I would like it even better if that last part was skipped though, not sure why. It just feels finished after Gareth's last line to me. :)

kuhori_rei May 19 2009, 15:17:59 UTC

Hee, everyone seems to like Gareth! He was pretty hot, not gonnna lie. ;)

I wasn't a big fan of the last line, either. I might decide to scrap it, not sure yet.

Thanks! :)

katden May 17 2009, 02:43:12 UTC

Okay....I don't want to sound snippy or anything...But How Do You Do This??? Consistently create interesting, sweet, darling, emotionally riveting characters that I Love every single damn week? How?
You are annoyingly brilliant.
Really.
And besides Gareth with the cheekbones and the mopey sweetheart that is Jonah I completly Adore the smartass secretary.
Ugh...!

katden May 17 2009, 02:44:06 UTC

Ignore typo.
Dang it.

kuhori_rei May 19 2009, 15:17:15 UTC

Um...practice? lol. I write for a living, so if people don't like my characters, I'm kind of...well, screwed. :P

Gareth is totally hot. I'd hit it. ;) Emlyn made me grin while I was writing her.

Thanks! :)

Love love love esteebee May 17 2009, 06:12:39 UTC

Hello my genius friend!! Every week you make me fall for your characters, and this week I REALLY just want you to fill in Tuesday night :)

I LOVE Gareth's character so so much! He seems very awesome <3 I really enjoyed your constant references to his cheek bones as well!!

I'm super tied so I'm going to bed, but AWESOME JOB!!! <3
I can't wait to see you next week!!

Re: Love love love kuhori_rei May 19 2009, 15:10:26 UTC

Hello my lovely! Hee, I'm glad you like the characters every week! I'm pretty fond of them myself.

Gareth's pretty hot, ngl. I'd hit that. ;)

Goodnight m'love, SO EXCITED TO SEE YOU SOON.

cedarwolfsinger May 17 2009, 22:20:55 UTC

This is sweet and witty and fun. Nice work!

kuhori_rei May 19 2009, 15:08:07 UTC

Thank you! :)