Comments | pbfic_exchange2: "Digging in the Dirt", for domfangirl

pbfe_mod in pbfic_exchange2

"Digging in the Dirt", for domfangirl

Jan 14, 2009 21:31

Title: Digging in the Dirt
Author: To be revealed
Rating:R for language and mentions of drug use and violence
Category:Gen, Het
Characters: Lincoln Burrows, Derek Sweeney, Crab Simmons, Michael Scofield, Lisa Rix, LJ Burrows, mention of Sara Tancredi
Requested by: domfangirl
Summary:There's a saying by someone that goes if you're in hole, stop digging. That ( Read more... )

exchange 7

Comments 17

(The comment has been removed)

msgenevieve January 27 2009, 10:05:17 UTC

Thanks!

That scene was just so, I don't know, wrong. It felt out of place in the universe I'd built up in my head from the canon we'd been given, and I knew that domfangirl *hated* it with a fiery passion. I wanted to make sense of it, and it wasn't easy, because it was such an OOC scene, but I made domfangirl happy, and that's the most important thing. :)

happywriter06 January 15 2009, 22:11:19 UTC

There are some things the writers can't give or won't give the viewers. Like what we got here as far as the motivation for the smash and grab, I don't know if the writers could've conveyed the emotions you gave us. That has more to do with the medium than anything else so maybe the writers shouldn't have given us that scene if they couldn't do it like but that's another story.

The point is you've taken a WTF moment of almost epic proportions and made it work that it's almost like 'I don't mind that scene so much now.' This is canon.

The scenes with Lisa in the beginning were so wonderful. I love both conversations with LJ. Why can't we have those on the show? *sigh* Anyway, just around great fleshing out of minor characters.

And then ending it with some truth between the brothers. LOVE!! If only there had been more honesty in the past...

msgenevieve January 27 2009, 10:07:02 UTC

That has more to do with the medium than anything else so maybe the writers shouldn't have given us that scene if they couldn't do it like but that's another story.

That's it in a nutshell. It was so jarring and out of place, it just felt off.

I'm glad you liked all the other stuff, too. I love writing Lincoln, and seeing his life unfold through his eyes is always something I enjoy.

darkwriter69 January 22 2009, 08:04:45 UTC

Great piece of writing. I've always liked Derek and wanted to know about Linc's past friendship(s) and you've done this wonderfully.

I love the way you've woven so many aspects of the show and the past together for Linc, like his relationship with LJ and Lisa, his deeper and deeper fall into crime and his relationship with Derek.

While the scene the writer's wrote for Linc/Derek may have worked on some level, it could never work if they wanted us to continue to believe that Linc was essentially a good guy and was worth saving. You've given this moment some meaning and perspective.

Thankyou so much.

Oh, and I loved the ending as well, with Linc finally feeling as though he deserved absolution.

msgenevieve January 27 2009, 10:13:05 UTC

Thanks!

I could have gone on and on with this story (so much pre-series stuff to explore, lol!) but after 18 pages, I told myself it was time to stop, lol!

Oh, and I loved the ending as well, with Linc finally feeling as though he deserved absolution.

Nothing like a moment of hope after all that misery. I think he (and his loved ones) deserve it. *g*

sk56 January 27 2009, 17:27:21 UTC

Life has been lifelike, so I'm just getting to some of this.

As usual, you knock me out.

One day, when all this bullshit is behind him, he’ll sit Michael down with a beer and he’ll tell him everything. Maybe they’ll even laugh at the ridiculousness of it all.

Your gift for putting real flesh on the moments in-between is glowing here.