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"Conquistador," 1/3 for linc_mike_jess

Mar 16, 2007 09:29

Title : Conquistador (1/3)
Rating : NC-17 (sexual situations)
Category : Angst, Drama, AU, Post-exoneration.
Characters : Michael/Sara, Lincoln, original characters
Requested by : linc_mike_jess
Summary : I’m not here because I love you. I’m here because of my fundamental inability to be happy.Thanks : to my wonderful beta-reader ( Read more... )

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anonymous March 22 2007, 19:43:12 UTC

Amazing. Sometimes, I can't really let myself buy that everything would be peachy for Michael even if his plan did work out, and it's times like that when I really appreciate the realistic, complex approach you've taken with this story. I'm off to the next chapter!

taxidryer March 24 2007, 02:04:26 UTC

Exactly what I think. Of course, I'd like him to be thoroughly happy after the Plan, but hey, life is life!
Thanks for the feedback :-)

rosie_spleen March 24 2007, 13:01:36 UTC

Hey troll,

Im reading and commenting on this in sections and so far I am hooked on the rhythm of it. How fantastic is this:

Call it a morbid fascination with tragedy. Michael calls it the uncontrollable stupidity of his mind. I love the timing of it and the self reflection of it. Also, the small hints of happiness -

He knows that the fury with which she tried to strangle one man before his eyes was just a pale reflection of the passion with which she can love another.

wonderful so far

taxidryer March 24 2007, 19:02:14 UTC

Hey Troll #1,

I'm glad you enjoy it so far. The rhythm was unconscious, I didn't do it on purpose. Correction: I know, the rhythm really is a brilliant idea of mine...

Call it a morbid fascination with tragedy.
You know what is frightening about that line? I probably have that problem myself. When am I going to write fluff?

Thanks for your feedback. It's flattering to have the Canon Queen among my readers ;o)