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FIC: Into the Fold, Chapter Fifteen

Sep 17, 2007 15:38

Title: Into the Fold
Author: Pasi
Category: Gen, with some Severus/Lily in this chapter.
Rating: 15
Summary for the Fic: Severus Snape is going straight to hell. The people he calls his friends are helping him get there.
Summary for Chapter Fifteen: Working on his Potions project leads Severus to a disagreement and a discovery.

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into the fold

Comments 10

pervert_bitch September 17 2007, 20:47:53 UTC

Lily is hurt, but if she think this logically, Severus does not think that "bad" of her or he wouldn't be asking her out :P
He was lashing because he was hurt. Something I expect Severus to do when he's hurt and humiliated.
Anyway, so sixth year and The Prank is about to happen uh? But if Severus already suspected Remus to be a werewolf, then why would he had heed Sirius' suggestion to follow Remus on a full moon?
This story is so great :D

pasi September 18 2007, 13:28:36 UTC

You are thinking more logically than either one of them *g*.

Anyway, so sixth year and The Prank is about to happen uh?

I have a hard time, psychologically speaking, with the Prank taking place before Snape's Worst Memory. Why wouldn't Snape be careful to stay far away from MWPP? And how would they dare to bully him, with what he knows about them? And why would Remus let it happen--he's really putting himself in danger that way. So I left the Prank where I'd originally planned to place it, in sixth year.

But if Severus already suspected Remus to be a werewolf, then why would he had heed Sirius' suggestion to follow Remus on a full moon?

More about that later, but I see him as still not quite able to wrap his mind around the possibility that DD and the teachers would allow a werewolf into the school.

This story is so great :D

Thanks, glad you like it.

pervert_bitch September 18 2007, 14:59:43 UTC

I am thinking more logically 'cause I am no teenager :P

Yes, and I totally agree with you. Come one, with that order JK made those marauders even more jerks! How can they still be bastards after they almost kill Severus?

So, MOAR!

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pasi September 18 2007, 13:29:49 UTC

Thank you for reading and reviewing!

zainne September 18 2007, 00:09:49 UTC

Lovely chapter, I find I appreciate this fic even more now, after DH.

pasi September 18 2007, 13:30:40 UTC

Thanks! Glad you're enjoying it.

dracoena September 18 2007, 15:53:12 UTC

This chapter is very good. I am excited to see how you wrap everything in your old canon so it stays true to the new book at least in spirit. The Snape/ Lily relationship you portray is even less of a plot device than Rowling´s- it just keeps growing speedily and believably as those two geniuses match their wits in complicated potion-brewing. ;)

Sometimes, however, I can´t help but wonder what the hell is Snape thinking about. Does he really plan to use Veritaserum on a fellow student, being aware of how many people *know* that Lily and him are making it? Can´t this go horribly wrong for him?
I know, this is the same person who walked into a dark and probably dangerous tunnel just because his worst enemy had told him to - but he didn´t have months to think that over...

pasi September 20 2007, 00:36:25 UTC

The potions stuff is fun to write. Glad you're liking it. Can't comment much on the Veritaserum, but the fact that Severus in particular is brewing it does have a use in the plot.

Thank you!

lyras November 12 2007, 15:00:34 UTC

Ooh! As always, this instalment leaves me wanting more. Which is good, since I now have your new chapter to britpick. *g*

I'm still impressed and intrigued at your inventiveness on the subject of potions. But for me what makes this chapter so enthralling is the way you intertwine Severus and Lily's (in some ways quite enticing) relationship with the distance between them, and between their attitudes. Severus is just so far from Lily's way of thinking, and he'll never understand how to bridge the gap. Lovely stuff!

(And I hope to get to the new chapter tomorrow.)

pasi November 12 2007, 23:44:25 UTC

...since I now have your new chapter to britpick.

Good! There's housing stuff in it, and I always have a problem with that.

I'm still impressed and intrigued at your inventiveness on the subject of potions.

Thanks! Though maybe in the interests of full disclosure, I should say the jobberknoll comes from Fantastic Beasts.

Severus is just so far from Lily's way of thinking...

That made DH so sad. Between Severus's upbringing, his personality, his attitudes, his House.... It just wasn't going to happen.