theory and practice (The New Slang Remix) [FMA, Hawkeye, Roy]

[thedeadparrot]

Title: theory and practice (The New Slang Remix)
Fandom: Fullmetal Alchemist
Characters: Hawkeye, Roy
Summary: Hawkeye learns to shoot.
Notes: A remix of zauberer_sirin's awesome theory and practice, because she said she wanted one, and I was more than happy to comply. Alas, I wish I could do it more justice.

Comments

[inane_nana]

Beautiful.
She will regret learning the things she learns today (the way to rest a rifle against your shoulder, how to line up the barrel of the gun with the target), but he will be there, be present.
Am not sure why, but I love this sentence. It's simply breathtaking, <3

Wonderful job.

[thedeadparrot]

Thank you. :) Though zau is still far better at the pretty writing thing than me. Seriously.

[thedeadparrot]

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.

[moon_wing]

Wonderfully done!

[thedeadparrot]

Thank you!

[threeonetwo]

That was beautifully written, seriously. I loved it.

[thedeadparrot]

Thank you. I'm thrilled you liked it.

[zauberer_sirin]

*is at work and is not allowed but couldn´t help bu reading it*

love it. your language is gorgeous -clean and sharp, deathly.

In those days, she will talk to a man who has also learned these things, and they will understand each other in a way that she will never be able to fully define or ever explain.

i loved this. this part is what sold the fic to me. i´m very flattered that you have done this with my story. *blushes*

[thedeadparrot]

YOU WERE ALL LIKE, YOU WON'T DO IT. AND I WAS ALL LIKE, YOU BET YOUR ASS I WILL.

And I totally fail at remixing, because remixing is supposed to be about pushing the story as far as it will go, and I couldn't quite bring myself to do that here because your structure was just so awesome.

I'm really, really thrilled you like it, because dude, it was for you.

(We're doing the circle jerk thing again, aren't we? Bad authors. Bad, bad authors.)

[zauberer_sirin]

i forgot to mention the ending! it´s flawless, i love it. i wish i could say something more profound or useful than "i love it! squee!" but i totally fail.

(We're doing the circle jerk thing again, aren't we? Bad authors. Bad, bad authors.)

you make me squee! so much, cause for me you are a big name (i don´t know if in terms of popularity in the fandom but in Zau´s list of fic authors you are definitely a big name) and this, this is what i used to dream of in 1998 and read x-files fics, wishing i could talk to the cool authors... and here i am, talking to you. <3

[thedeadparrot]

Haw. I don't see myself as big name at all, and it always surprises me when someone treats me that way. Am I intimidating or something? 'Cause I'm fairly sure I'm not. :p

(P.S. You totally owe me a remix now.)