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Dark City, Silent God [2/2]

Jan 31, 2014 19:52

Title: Dark City, Silent God
Pairing: Baekhyun/Luhan, Baekhyun/Chanyeol
Rating: PG-13
Genre: RPG!AU, Post-apocalyptic!AU, Sci-fi, Dystopian (?), Tragedy (?)
Warnings: Hover
Length: ~6.6k (total ~15.2k)
Summary: The cost to start a revolution always runs a little high.

( Maybe it’s just the brightness of the lights that burns his eyes, but the past is glaringly beautiful. )

g: sci-fi, g: post-apocalyptic, g: dystopia, g: tragedy, p: baekyeol, p: baekhan, t: dark city, g: rpg!au, r: pg13

Comments 8

tinystargazer February 1 2014, 11:06:10 UTC

THIS IS AMAZING. fudge but my heart..... my heart has a freaking hole..... lubaek is one of my top otps and why oh why did this all have to hurt????

you did a really great job. Thank you for writing this. Bless your soul, oh gosh I wanna tell you to write more but I'm so scared that there won't be lubaek anymore but at the same time i wanna find out what happens with luhan and the rest~ (but minseok-ahhh and chanyeol-ahh my heart is hurt again T_T)

Sorry gonna stop babbling now... this fic is golden by the way, last thing.. bbye! xD (maybe i'll comment properly next time when my feelings are not in turmoil lol)

parkourdeer February 1 2014, 19:07:56 UTC

thank you so much!! i'm glad you enjoyed it ^^

and i definitely will write a sequel (sometime in the [far] future) sO I HOPE you come back to read that one as well thanK YOU FOR COMMENTING AND IM GLAD YOU LIKED IT REALLY!!!

svtstarlight February 1 2014, 14:57:06 UTC

Wow. Just... wow.

parkourdeer February 1 2014, 19:08:07 UTC

orz thank you, i think???

svtstarlight February 1 2014, 19:22:32 UTC

well really, I don't know what to say, I am just so in awe of this. so much imagination. so jelly. LOL <3 (plus hard to give big comments when dealing with a little baby...hehe)

parkourdeer February 1 2014, 19:49:36 UTC

thank you so much OTL dw abt it i just wasnt sure if it was a good wow or a bad wow hahA but !!! thank you so much for reading and enjoying ^^ /throws cookies at you and the little baby/

ext_2378278 August 19 2015, 14:05:50 UTC

I love the idea of the story, and i would give you credit for making my eyes swolen due to so much reading at night. ;p

But, i also hope u can cut your writing style a bit short. It's good to have detail description. But at some part, especially the tension part it just kill down my excitement.

Dont get me wrong because i didnt mean anything bad. I just hope than u can write better, if this wasnt the best yet, for other story, and so u know that short and precise are sometimes better especially for action or thriller or anything that have your adrenaline rushing through your whole body.

Thanks for the amazing story.

parkourdeer August 19 2015, 19:28:43 UTC

ahhhhhh at last someone agrees with me abt the complete mess that this fic is

my writing does tend to be rather long-winded and convoluted but i think i've worked out some of the kinks on that in my later writing (hopefully????), which still tends to be rather convoluted but less so and (((hopefully...))) in more appropriate places (i.e. tense actiony parts of the story r not for describing the horizon line, lmao). this story esp was a struggle bc i kept getting stuck so i just rambled on baekhyun's internal monologue until i got somewhere, which is probably where a lot of the tension-killing comes from, lmao!!

anyway, thank you very much for your feedback! i'm glad you enjoyed it regardless of my more.... erm, fetus-levels of writing lmao