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Team Jon: Blood is Thicker Than Water

Oct 03, 2008 13:04

Title: Because We’re The Best Cops You’ll Ever Meet.
Team: Jon
Prompt: Blood is Thicker Than Water
Rating: PG-13- cursing, sexual themes, and comments about suicide, death.
Warnings: Non-main character death, comments about suicide, murder.
Pairing: Jon/Spencer; Brendon/Ryan; ONLY A LITTLE OFC/OMC
Summary: The Panic boys are cops, and they must ( Read more... )

round i, pairing:jon/spencer, length:medium, pairing:ryan/brendon, team:jon, rating:pg-13, prompt:blood is thicker than water

Comments 2

lessthan3lovers October 5 2008, 12:50:15 UTC

I liked this a lot.
However, it was not perfect.
There were a fair number of grammatical errors, including missing words and other things that made it hard to read. And there were some things that didn't make any sense, like the whole not-figuring-out-who-the-gun-belonged-to-until-the-end.

But overall, certainly not a bad fic.

silver_etoile October 5 2008, 16:53:09 UTC

i liked it! but, i think you need to watch a little more CSI because some of the things that happen, like not checking the bullets first or not finding the cell phone, or Brendon's obvious distraction and unprofessionalism... maybe I just watch too much CSI. anyway. though. it was good, and I did like the Jon/Spencer interaction, but I feel like it could have been fleshed out more if there was more time. :]