it's 7:30 & this is where it all really starts

[pandastacia]

This is the actual beginning of Toxic. RushSimone don't appear in Present!Time because it's centuries after their time, but... you'll see. Yeah. So... here we go.

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Comments

[xfucktheglasses]

FIRSTLY:

"Besides, she makes she gets the good stories" -> I guess you were going for one but decided on the other and wound up with both? "she makes" shouldn't be there, I believe. But that's just me...

"when she fighting some inner temptation" -> you ate a word up, in there somewhere. ;D

Also, the part about sunshine yellow and lime green hair confused me. But maybe that's just me. Perhaps it was a way to imply hair dyes? Or...?

Other than that, I really, really like this. I still flail over Duchess' name because its so beautiful and pretty and flailtastic. Not to mention that Josie is quite amusing and adorable.

Les likes~

[pandastacia]

Ahhh! Thanks! I forgot a word there - "Besides, she makes sure she gets the good stories."

*she was fighting

The natural hair colors here are different from ours, so I was referring to a yellow color that almost seems to be lime green?

Me too~ :3 I'm glad! I'm gonna keep writing this & when I get more confident in the world, I'll be a lot more descriptive. :D

<3

[justlovely_9]

This is awesome, Sonya~~

I absolutely love Josie, she's so adorable and multi-dimensional, I'd say. She has all these different parts of her, the part that wants to tell the secret and the part that's holding her back, the one that is passionate about her views and then the one that is the caring friend first.
The Duchess is equally amusing.

I really love how you can have this nice banter going on, as well as include all the other details, it doesn't sway from the subject at hand but adds to it in a way that doesn't make it seem heavy, if that makes sense.

<3 it's wonderful!

[pandastacia]

Thank you! :D I hope I have the momentum within me to continue. OTL

Josie has so much life & Duchess is more... jaded, snarky... I still need more of this chapter & the next two to... IDK - I want to finish them because I just know that the set-up has to be perfect. You know?

Ahhh, GOOD! :D Thank you - I was worried about having them talk, having it seem natural, but not impeding it with details, which is, I think, partly why there aren't so many details yet.

I SHALL KEEP GOING! <3

[anticollision]

i adored this.
josie was so--i don't know--real. she sort of reminds me of one of my best friends. that attitude and adorableness all rolled into one. a good character.
and i really like duchess' character (and her name, it's so prettyyy). she and josie interact lovely.

i would like to see more of this eventuallyyy~

[pandastacia]

Thank you~

I adore Josie - she's pretty & lively & all flailtastic.

I shall try my best! :D

[cutecrazyice]

ASDFGHJKL flaaaailflailflail. :D You updated. :D

[pandastacia]

<3

Yup, but my focus for the next while will be planning this thing within an inch of its life while writing a less complicated story that I've been planning for a while. :)

[cutecrazyice]

Aww, okay. :D Good luck!