Title: Forgiveness is love

[pagan21]

Title: Forgiveness is love
Pairing: Gackt x Hyde
Oneshot
Warnings: Yaoi, fluff,
Summary: Hyde gets annoyed at Gackt. Gackt seeks forgiveness with white cuteness. Will Hyde forgive him?
Disclaimer: If I owned them i wouldn’t have to write this. all rights to their rightful owners.

Comments

[saurgristiel]

I will comment here because it's a little more private ^_^

Like another person pointed out, you did switch tenses from start to finish. You really shouldn't do that.

Don't put authors notes in the middle of the narrative/story. Put them at the end, and if you must mark a note, use: (1), [1], <*sub>1 = text1, or <*sup>1 = text1 (take out the * in sub or sup, otherwise it won't work), or text*/ text** (with whatever number of note it is, then have a list of your notes at the bottom). Take b-sim for example or Unwritten-ideas, or Paraph. Ideally, you only need footnotes if there is something to clarify, point out, explain, not so much for commentary. But whatever you need to comment on should be at the end. ^_^

Aside from that^ this was really cute ^_^

[eadwine63]

ah yes... can I say some things too? That A/N should NOT be in the middle. It KILLS the flow of your fic. :(

I'm not gonna comment on tenses or sentence structure. xD I read it this morning but didn't have time to comment anymore cause I needed to go to work. ehem.

so it was a nice little ficcie. So cute and awwww.. Gackt was so in doubt and it was adorbs. ^_^ Hyde was all 'I want it to mean something' (which I would totally do too) and then when he did the "I LOVE YOU *repeat x50* it even felt like it didn't mean anything since it came out so easily and just .. too much. So that was really my favourite part, since it really had nice emotions in it. But aww, Gackt wanting to be so romantic and willing to apologise! but yes indeed... horny devil. xD

I do vote FOR the editing in smut later... ^_^ *pervs out*

[pagan21]

Hai hai! gomen i thought i had done so but i actually forgot to erase it and simply double posted it by accident... gah ok now it's fixed, thanks for pointing that out. and thank you for comment sharon-chan! i will probably write the smut. i'm just so busy! tones of hw and then the aoi gacku fic and then the mpreg gacku yosh fic n then the mana and yosh and gackt fic, and then the sugizo and yosh fic and then your sam dean fic plus i have to deal with friends and family...gah. tis alot. anyways i shouldnt' complain. my life is great, honestly. just alot to do.

[love_teddies]

so cute and fluffy that im going to die of over fluffs...

the ending was LOL