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Porn Battle VII (The Seven Deadly Sins) - entry post 2

Jan 29, 2009 23:43

We're just four days into the Battle, and I don't think one post will big enough for all the pornlets, so I'm opening a second one. All new pornlets to go here, please.

( copy of the battle rules )

challenge: porn battle, challenge

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Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch fawsley January 31 2009, 17:00:06 UTC

Tyler pale and terrified and quaking in his Cuban heels was not a sight you got to see everyday of the week. It was enough to make him pull down the blinds and shut the office door, even give a nod to the rest of the team to send them scampering off elsewhere, anywhere, didn’t matter where ( ... )

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch severinne January 31 2009, 17:14:04 UTC

Nggghhh...

*fneurgle*

If you expect me to leave coherent feedback after that, you're... umm.... fuck. Excuse me.

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch fawsley January 31 2009, 17:16:41 UTC

You are excused, hon! Glad to have induced a filthy fneurgle.
I'm not to be excused for having managed to include 'smart' twice in the last sentence, dammit...
*grumps*

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch severinne January 31 2009, 17:21:53 UTC

You seriously think I was in any condition to notice repetitive word choices in the last sentence?!?! *smacks you*

*goes back to reread for said issues*

*fneurgle*

Okay, time for a shower methinks...

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch fawsley January 31 2009, 17:50:09 UTC

I've got two shudderings too. I'm seriously tempted to take it all down and edit the hell out of it, like wot I thought I'd done in the first place.

*is a picky pain*

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch dock_leaf January 31 2009, 18:17:44 UTC

Well, at least you're writing!!

And ahem, very nicely indeedy if I may say so. Yes. Very nice...

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch fawsley January 31 2009, 18:28:42 UTC

Up to scratch, eh?

*glomps you simply because you are gorgeously glompworthy*

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch mikes_grrl January 31 2009, 19:02:27 UTC

uh, like, unnnnhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...

HOT and omg YES, this is exactly what Gene would do, that clever brilliant bastard!

So sexy. Love this! ...but you knew I would. :)

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch fawsley January 31 2009, 19:18:46 UTC

Thanks hon! I was making similar noises whilst writing it...
I'm cross with all the repetitions that I couldn't spot before but which now are blindingly obvious but that just serves me right for posting it too quickly. Hopefully the hot secksin cancels out most of them.

And you'll be pleased to know that the big block that made me write this instead of you-know-what has now magically resolved itself and so much that wasn't working is now coming together beautifully.
*hugs self*

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch mikes_grrl January 31 2009, 19:30:15 UTC

You know, just stop admitting things. Because me? I was all BLINDED BY YOUR BRILLIANCE at the repetitions, how wonderfully they flowed and reflected the feeling of Sam being jittery and Gene being annoyed.

I guess the lesson here is trust your instincts? You should.

And YAY stuff coming together beautifully! *is anxious but not going to be pushy*

*eyes pokey stick*

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch norfolkdumpling January 31 2009, 20:02:04 UTC

Good Christ woman! Have you got any idea of the effect of reading this while simultaneously watching Rupe on TV? Trust me...it's messy. *g*

Just hot as hell, and the boys at their very best. As always in your writing. Thank you hon ♥

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch fawsley January 31 2009, 22:06:22 UTC

Messy in an exceedingly good way I trust! Will send the Guv round to rinse you off if you like. He can bring his large and flexible hose. Though Sammy's not sure if it will fit. In the car that is, you filthy minded bint you!

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Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch fawsley January 31 2009, 22:08:42 UTC

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed the filth and hope you didn't make any embarrassing noises in public. Well, actually, I rather hope you did!

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch slash4femme February 1 2009, 18:27:33 UTC

Gah! that's just too hot. I can't even think, right after reading that, it. . .it. . . really, really hot, and funny and wonderful.

Re: Bodywork, Life on Mars (UK), Sam/Gene, scratch fawsley February 3 2009, 17:11:16 UTC

Thank you! That's exactly the reaction I was hoping for - very similar to how I felt while writing it... *g*

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