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Porn Battle VII (The Seven Deadly Sins)

Jan 25, 2009 18:48

Porn Battle VII (The Seven Deadly Sins) IS A GO

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Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir inathunderstorm January 27 2009, 21:05:54 UTC

"Gail," he says from his office, drawing out the syllables in that way she hates, Ga-ail. "Could you come in here, please?"

She answers that in her head all the time. No, Mr. Profit. I can't. You're a very bad man and I don't know why I keep working here, because I could get another job if I really wanted, one where I didn't have to do your dirty work and ruin men's lives.

And in her head, he answers in that voice that sounds like whiskey-soaked gravel, do you think I'd ever let you go, Gail?

And no, no she doesn't. Mr. Profit knows about her moment of weakness, when she'd likened herself to Robin Hood and taken from the rich to serve the poor, and Mr. Profit is worse than the Sheriff of Nottingham and that snake and maybe she's confusing the movie and the Disney cartoon, now. But Mr. Profit has power over her, he has leverage, and Gail knows he's captured her well and good and proper.

Besides, says Mr. Profit's voice in her head, and she can see his smile, slick like oil. You know the men I'm ruining as are as bad as I am.So she ( ... )

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir velvetwhip January 27 2009, 23:23:33 UTC

Okay, this is simply superb. What else can I say?

Gabrielle

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir inathunderstorm January 28 2009, 01:15:46 UTC

Thank you v. much!

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir elanya January 28 2009, 00:26:48 UTC

I would like to add my fangirlish squealing to the wails of others. This was lovely. They do have such a wonderfuly fucked up dynamic. And the line about his eyes, and his smile, were superb.

....Although I might stand it if Jim smiled at me. Just a little. Chilling...

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir inathunderstorm January 28 2009, 01:12:54 UTC

Thank you! I really do enjoy them lots :)

...heh, me too :D

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir bluerosefairy January 28 2009, 03:39:45 UTC

OMG SOMEONE WROTE MY PROMPT! EEEEEE!

Oh, this is just gorgeous and perfect and I adore it. I love the Profit-voice in Gail's head - because that's what he does best, isn't it, gets into your head? - and Gail mixing up the Disney and movie versions of Robin Hood.

Just, wow. Fantastic.

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir inathunderstorm January 28 2009, 03:46:46 UTC

Eeee! Someone WROTE a prompt for them! I was way excited to see it, and I hope to write a few more before Sunday :D

And yay! I'm really glad you liked it!! :)

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Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir inathunderstorm January 28 2009, 03:47:12 UTC

I should have known you'd like this show. ::adores you::

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir minttown1 January 28 2009, 04:08:38 UTC

This is excellent.

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir inathunderstorm January 28 2009, 04:09:28 UTC

Thank you very much!!

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir serrico January 28 2009, 05:17:13 UTC

Ooooh, yes. Everything that isn't happening simmering along underneath everything that *is*. *Lovely.*

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir inathunderstorm January 28 2009, 05:21:09 UTC

Thank you very much!! :) I do love them so.

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Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir inathunderstorm January 28 2009, 14:39:26 UTC

Thank you very much for reading! Their relationship was my absolute favorite thing about the show. SO MESSED UP. :D

Re: Prey, Profit, Jim/Gail, sir giventofly37 January 28 2009, 08:05:05 UTC

He's sprawled in his chair, deceptively loose-limbed like a lazy panther napping in the sun, eyes half-opened and waiting for prey stupid enough to get too close.

THIS. OMG THIS.

This whole thing is just awesome, ngh. Makes me wish I hadn't taken down my Profit icons, woe. *flails*

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