Comments | oxoniensis: Life ficlet: the rain and the sun

oxoniensis

Life ficlet: the rain and the sun

Jan 01, 2009 18:11

the rain and the sun [Life, Charlie, Ted, R, 385 words. A little yuletide treat written for nestra. Thanks to Kristin for the super-quick beta. Can also be read here on the yuletide archive.]

( He lies in bed that night, ignores the scratch of cheap cotton and Ted's soft snores, and imagines being an apple. )

fiction: life, fandom: life, challenge: yuletide, fiction

Comments 11

annabeth January 1 2009, 18:32:28 UTC

This is lovely.

I admit, though, that it took me a bit to realise Charlie was still inside when it takes place.

I really enjoy the way you phrase things, btw, like Enjoys the moment of release and the bone-slack peace it brings.

And I like the fact that he doesn't eat the apple till afterwards.

:D

(The closest thing I have to a Life icon...)

oxoniensis January 1 2009, 21:44:28 UTC

I'm glad you enjoyed it - Charlie Crews is quite a fascinating character, both to watch and to write.

I might just try and edit the opening, see if I can make it a bit clearer - you're right, it isn't obvious enough.

annabeth January 1 2009, 22:40:55 UTC

It was the Formica tabletop that threw me... I was pictuing the scene from the first season where Constance was in Charlie's kitchen.

oxoniensis January 1 2009, 22:43:04 UTC

Ah, I was thinking of cheap Formica in a prison visiting room. Isn't his kitchen table wood? Anyway, I've added a little line, which hopefully makes it a wee bit clearer. :-)

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oxoniensis January 1 2009, 21:44:45 UTC

Thanks! :-)

elzed January 1 2009, 22:02:38 UTC

Hee - I had no idea it was you when I commented on it! But I don't think I've read any Life fic from you before (mind you, Yuletide was my first go at it, too...)

Funny how some fandoms overlap each other, isn't it?

oxoniensis January 1 2009, 22:10:22 UTC

So weird, getting a comment from you on my Life fic while I was reading yours!

It's not a show I actually watch that regularly, but I try to catch up on it when I can, because the characters are fascinating. Funnily enough, the only time I've written in the fandom before was a little Charlie masturbating ficlet for a Porn Battle!

fleshflutter January 1 2009, 22:40:19 UTC

Oh this was lovely! You caught Charlie and Ted's relationship just wonderfully in that short exchange about humming! :)

oxoniensis January 1 2009, 22:43:52 UTC

Thank you! I do love scenes between the two of them - they verge on the surreal sometimes.

xmarisolx November 5 2010, 14:14:18 UTC

This was so Charlie and so Ted, and somehow so delightfully smutty and wholesome at the same time.

oxoniensis November 6 2010, 10:50:42 UTC

I'm so happy it seemed in character for them - they were a great couple of characters. I miss this show!