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[owls_in_winter]

Author name: Neens
Fic title: The Long Road (with Twists)
Summary: Decisions determine destiny.
Pairing: Christoph Metzelder/Sebastian Kehl
Rating: NC-17
Disclaimer: Not true in the least bit. I'm just borrowing their public persona to play.
Archive: None, please ask first.
Notes: 5,123 words, beta-ed by the lovely nora1980 - thank you ever so much for

Comments

[karlie_dakota]

Oh Nina...this is so. fucking. perfect.

*puts it to the memories*

I love how you followed these two angles - and damn, can I tell you that the sad story broke my heart? No fan of Iago. No fan of Metze hooking up with anyone but Kelly. Yet in the end even the heart breaking storyline is good - because fuck, it's realistic, it could happen like this, it happens like this, even if not to Metzelly. God. I wouldn't be able to spot a flaw in this story if I had a magnifying glass and three weeks time. The style is rich without being overbearing. The sheer amount of details - they naturally fit into the story, it just flows...if you'll forgive my that hippie phrase and my awkward English. ;)

Basti can feel his glances, though, and he smiles as he looks out of the window, the glare of the sun making him close his eyes until he sees only reddish warmth.

Pure poetry. So. fucking. good.

Or this one:

The curve of her back is graceful, hidden under the light blue pareo, and it looks like one of these Kodak moments in the ads…Or why not

Reply I

[ninamalfoy]

*is so totally floored* Oh man, what a comment! *laughs breathlessly and blushes*

and damn, can I tell you that the sad story broke my heart? No fan of Iago. No fan of Metze hooking up with anyone but Kelly. Yet in the end even the heart breaking storyline is good - because fuck, it's realistic, it could happen like this, it happens like this, even if not to Metzelly.

Aw! Poor Iago. (*g*) But yeah - it could happen like this, it has happened and will happen like this all over the world in different constellations. *nods* And I think Metze wouldn't fall in love with a footballer again (too many problems, secrecy etc.), so it would be someone who's secure in his sexuality and challenges Metze, shows him a different life than the one of a footballer, someone like that might be perfect - someone with a big heart, gentle and understanding and giving Metze all the time he needs, someone like this would be perfect for him - and that's who Iago is. :-)

I love the concept, though at this point that may not come as a surprise. If you

Reply II

[ninamalfoy]

You mean the RUND article from December 2006? Yeah, I translated that one on my LJ, too. *nods* And I remember what you said, yes. The other footie player said that he finds his sex partners in online chats and such, and oh, my heart went out to him, as much as to the one who's married and whose wife doesn't know that his heart actually belongs to his boyfriend. *sighs* Yeah, that would be possible, totally. I'd love to write such a constellation, but then the boyfriend would have to be an OC, like Iago. To imagine that they've been friends forever and ever, and the boyfriend keeps mum for his partner, knowing that he's married with kids, and how much must it hurt when he reads articles about the happy family of footie player so-and-so... what sacrifices for true love

Re: Reply II

[karlie_dakota]

And awwww... thank you again for your elaborate feedback, I really loved it!

No deal. You deserve it. ^^

Thanks for the footie recs, I'll check them out (actually I already know "Invictus" and love it to bits - it's one of the rare plotty exceptions :-). I agree that the "plot problem" seems to be a home-made phenomena of the footie fandom. Pretty understandable, since it's quite small and has a very fixed setting. I used to read tons of HP fanfiction and the situation there is almost opposite. The setting is very open to all kind of storylines - you can find every genre in HP, epically written out, brillant. No wonder with the sheer amount of HP writers. The abudandance of intriguing HP stories is obscene...and yet I still quit reading them. *shrug*

As for the Metzelly - well, I probably am prone to idolize my guys way too much, in that I think that Basti's too much of a straightforward character to lie to Tina for a longer timespan - a decade or two (...)I know what you mean...it's a scene difficult to picture, isn't it? Because

[roopkatha]

These tiny cubicles on flights are not so much toilets as torture rooms; everything's so small you constantly hit yourself on something, and it sucks, and Basti's crying.

Oh God, Nina. You made me cry. The ache in this is unbearable.

[ninamalfoy]

*huggles* Aw, Mimi. Yes - but in the end, Basti learns to live with it, and whenever dark thoughts whispering 'what if...' sneak their way into his dreams, he tells himself that his family is worth it - that Luis is worth it, and that it would've been impossible, after all.

*sighs* Oh, Basti. This Basti is as much a hero as the other one, both shaped by their decisions and stepping into their destinies with a smile on their lips, each with a Metze at their side who is laughing and teasing them.

[roopkatha]

You are my hero. I am almost permanently on hiatus these days, but you know that I love you and always care. Take care of yourself, okay? *hugs tight*

[oh_so_blase]

I'm going to build a monument for you, just you. Because you write them so beautiful and real, it's quite painful. It's been a while since the last time I've read Metzelly and I had been missing them, and come along again with this brilliant, heartaching, epic and- fuck.

I just love how you wrote 2 different "endings" [because they never have an end] for them. And it seems like this could happen, to anyone and it probably does. Just the thought of this being real makes me wish the world was different. They must suffer so much for love, people in general do. Bue when you're in the public eye and you love someone but you can't be with them [like that article] well, yeah...

Also, I've always loved your depth of their characteristics but I think you've outdone yourself here. This is, by far, the best Metzelly fics I've ever read and one of the best fics i've ever read, in general.

Basti visits Metze in the summer for a week and it was like it always had been, full of laughter and love and long talks deep into the night and when he has

[ninamalfoy]

*blushes and flails* Oh - oh, thank you for loving the Metzelly as much as I do! And damn it, I think I can't stop grinning ever because of your lovely compliments. :-)

sigh. I kind of hate dislike Iago for coming between Metze and Basti but, i guess, their desicions let to that. and your fic shows that. =/

Yeah - poor Iago, but you have to move on or you'll waste time carving out a future for yourself - not necessarily what you'd have dreamt of back then, but something you long for, and if it turns out differently than you envisioned it, well, that's God laughing at you while you plan. And that's what Metze did...

... and yes, the part where Basti breaks down broke me, too. Oh, Basti.

both of the endings made me happy [the first way more than the last]. It seems like no matter what happens in their life, who they're with, who they're not with, they'll always have each other. always.*squees* Exactly! They'll always have each other, forever and ever, even if the outcome may be different, there's always Metze'n'Basti, laughing in

[cerulean_eyes]

You know, I missed this. Missed the quality, the depth, the involvement... you feel so much for your characters and in return, it makes us, the reader, feel so much for them, for their story and their feelings.

I love it. I love it so much that I'm not quite sure why - it just affects me and I'm always afraid to go analysing as to why it works so well.

I love the distinction between the paragraphs - the gray/white background. Visually it works to separate the thoughts really well... just so shiny.

Brilliant job, this.

[ninamalfoy]

Awwwwwwwww! *huggles you tightly while trying not to grin so broadly* Funny thing is that I just started to write this, plodding along, not sure if it'd measure up to my other Metzelly fics, and so far the comments have just bowled me over. :-)

And yeah, after my beta said that it was difficult for her to switch back from the one POV to the other (I had just used cursive script for the one POV to keep them apart), I finally figured out how to use < div > in a post - and I've been using LJ for five years already! *g*

Thanks so much, love, it really means a lot to hear this from you. *blows kisses*

[dropsofcoffee]

Really, let me start with saying: This is just brilliant.

But really, this is just beautiful. I have to admit it took me quite some time to understand that this is not, well, one story, but one with two strands of plot. It's either or, which is just brilliant (I'm repeating myself, I know this).

And it's all about Basti who is able to decide how the story ends, with both of them and their happily ever after, or just with Metze being happy and Basti being content.

Both are just so beautiful and then the way you write, damn - what you write is just amazing, but there's still so much said between each and every word which makes this story - every story of yours - so unique. You really create a world behind theese sentences in which I can dive in and never wanna emerge again.

"Quién es?"

That's not Metze's voice. Basti frowns and looks at the cell display - 'Metze'.

This is when you know that things change. Lukily, that never happened to me, but I think you know that things have changed. I instantly knew what was coming.

He's not

[dropsofcoffee]

Sorry, I just realised I screwed over the whole Layout-Coding-Thing. And please overread the tons of grammatical mistakes :-(