new chapter

[owlmoose]

I had been having trouble deciding how the structure of the next few chapters of AGL was going to work, but the answer hit me in the shower this morning. So I spent the next hour rearranging some things and planning some others, and now Chapter 33 is upNow all I want to do is stay right here and keep working on all the other pieces that fell into

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[kunstarniki]

Showers do have a way of unsticking things. I have R&R chapter 33.

Re: I

[owlmoose]

I remembered your recent comments about being inspired in the shower as I was posting this. I wonder if it's because the brain has so little external stimulation and the body is working by rote, so all that's left is to focus internally.

I appreciate the review. You are right about Liss not being as strongly drawn as the other characters; I've often thought that her characterization is the weakest part of the story. Youth is part of it, but I have the same problem with her as Gabaldon does with Brianna -- she exists to move the plot forward, not for any reason in herself. I've tried to make her more three dimensional but it's not easy. The other original characters do exist more clearly in my mind, particularly Arelle and Kal. This may come through in the story; I don't know.

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[kunstarniki]

Yes, I keep seeing Liss and Brianna as much the same - because you made them parallel in a comment. It is not easy to construct a valid young character when there is what amounts to an older counterpart who is more vital. Heh?

Re: I

[owlmoose]

You are exactly right, that it the difficulty. I've made every effort not to make Liss simply a young female Auron, but in the process I may have sapped some of her vitality. I did give her a few bits of her mother -- the eyes, a temper that burns cold -- but there hasn't been much opportunity to display them. Maybe further on in the story, although I'm not sure how much there is left.

[peachespig]

Stupid work! *Clinks glass*