I have put up my last follow-up to "One More Confessional". Does it work? I am still a little uncertain, to be truthful. My readers will have the final word on that. But it was a story I wanted to tell, and to share
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"They lost themselves and found each other" Beautiful beyond telling. You are the only one other than me who sees the possibility of that contrast between the cold of the left hand and the heat of the right. This was just wonderful. Sunshine after the storm. Thank you so much for persevering. I would never have thought of using the coeurl that way but you make it so inevitable.
KJ, we are going to have to work out a way to collaborate again. It was too exciting and inspiring to let it vanish. Once we have both had time to catch our respective breaths, let's give it another go.
BTW: I am about to start reading Outlander. From my first tentative taste, Claire already reminds me of you and Paine. LOL
Thank you for the lovely review. I have fixed the repeated spelling error; I can't believe I did that. I must have it wrong in my Word spellcheck.
My biggest concern in this piece was that I softened Nooj up too much, that he was too quick to admit some things. Did I take it too far? As for the coeurl, you set me up for this perfectly with "End of Innocence", especially the very last bit... not that you realized you were doing it, or that I knew you were going to. Pure luck? More likely we are reading one another's minds again. :) Yes, yes, we will have to find a way to collaborate again. No question about it.
Claire is an excellent character. I am very fond of her.
I do not think you softened him too much. I have never seen him as pig-headed in the manner of the Slime in the Oval Office. Nooj is a man governed by logic; if you can show him his error he will accept it. Here, he was obviously hungering for an excuse to return to the original relationship, for an explanation which would convince him he could trust himself again. You gave him what he needed and he was grateful. You did not violate my concept of the man at all.
As for the bit at the end of my story. What else could a fifteen-year-old boy think good enough for his love save his only real secret? It was a way for him to express his happiness and to show her he was not jealous that the kit liked her too. LOL
He grew up too fast in some ways and never grew up in others. But then, he is a man.
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Beautiful beyond telling. You are the only one other than me who sees the possibility of that contrast between the cold of the left hand and the heat of the right. This was just wonderful. Sunshine after the storm. Thank you so much for persevering. I would never have thought of using the coeurl that way but you make it so inevitable.
KJ, we are going to have to work out a way to collaborate again. It was too exciting and inspiring to let it vanish. Once we have both had time to catch our respective breaths, let's give it another go.
BTW: I am about to start reading Outlander. From my first tentative taste, Claire already reminds me of you and Paine. LOL
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My biggest concern in this piece was that I softened Nooj up too much, that he was too quick to admit some things. Did I take it too far? As for the coeurl, you set me up for this perfectly with "End of Innocence", especially the very last bit... not that you realized you were doing it, or that I knew you were going to. Pure luck? More likely we are reading one another's minds again. :) Yes, yes, we will have to find a way to collaborate again. No question about it.
Claire is an excellent character. I am very fond of her.
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As for the bit at the end of my story. What else could a fifteen-year-old boy think good enough for his love save his only real secret? It was a way for him to express his happiness and to show her he was not jealous that the kit liked her too. LOL
He grew up too fast in some ways and never grew up in others. But then, he is a man.
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