Mm, I really liked "In Fragments Unsettled" too. For my choice of DVD commentary I'm going to narrow down super-small on that fic to one word: "simple." I really loved the effect of that in the fic. Did you linger over the choice of the word or did it just come to you?
Hell yes! That would be a lot of win if we managed.
I'm very pleased someone picked up on that (I also remember you already mentioned it back then, so even better). :D Yes, I lingered. Or rather, the conclusion "just came to me" once I'd reached it, but the word had already appeared earlier (I think the sentence was something like, Gellert always had it simple). What I wanted to get across was Albus's perspective in this part, since I had the shifting "POV" that wasn't so much of a POV in the long run, and to show the remoteness of his understanding of Gellert by that time. As far as he could tell, Gellert was simply the one who had once broken his trust and disappeared. In that section of the story, Albus is dwelling on that, perhaps expecting Gellert to be like himself in that there was "more" to it than what had happened. But then he concludes that, no, there was probably never "more" to Gellert because they were not alike, after all, which he had learned the hard way. Maybe he does it to justify leaving Gellert to "have it simple
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Heh, well it was definitely one of my favorite things about the fic. Since seeing your explanating of how you meant this to work I think the first use of "simple" served the POV really well because it's obviously meant to be a kind of sneering, "You can rot in there for all I care," except more eloquently, and obliquely put. As you said, it's a safety mechanism, and it reveals Albus's state of mind.
Ooh, and I loved the ambiguousness of the final "simple." Firstly, in reference to the timing of it. Did he have it simple in his discussion with Voldemort? Or when he got AK'd? I like that you don't know exactly where the story ends. To me, the paragraph break implies that it's Gellert's death, but I like that there's a lack of stage direction there. No, "And then Voldemort raised his wand and Gellert had it simple."
Thanks for shedding more light on this. It was really cool to see your thoughts on it.
I'm glad you liked it so much. And definitely - I think Albus wanted to pay Gellert back with the same uncaring goodbye he might have thought Gellert had originally given him, but couldn't carry it through efficiently. After all, if he had, he wouldn't have been dwelling on it in the first place.
That's just the effect I was going for! Seriously, if you asked where exactly the story ends, I couldn't give a definite answer either. Basically I love playing with interpretation, be it mine or the readers'. (By the way, "And then Voldemort raised his wand and Gellert had it simple" cracked me up. Really, I laughed just now.)
He remembers how he ended up in bed, naked, Remus’s fevered skin pressed against his, even though Azkaban has rendered his memory unreliable.
Tenderness blends with urgency as that familiar bond he shares with his old friend and lover comes alive. Remus gives him everything and takes equally much, until only pleasure remains and nothing matters anymore.
Just before he falls asleep, there’s an apologetic, “Sirius, I can’t stay much longer. Order business...”
He doesn’t care.
And when he awakes later, alone, a cold blanket tangled around him, he wonders when exactly Remus left and why he hadn’t told him.
Wow, this one's old. But all right! I don't think there's too much here besides what it already implies: that Sirius can't stand his ground after Azkaban as well as he would have liked to. Understandably, since they don't get much together time with Remus, he gets immersed in the moment and doesn't want to "think about tomorrow" - even though Remus is trying to let him know where he stands, being the ever-practical one. He doesn't quite get through at the time, though, or maybe Sirius just forgets like he does so many minor things. But the damage is done and the rift between them widens. And we all know where the fifth book leads...
It's even more depressing when elaborated on, heh. Sorry? XD
Not more depressing than the last three books though :) I just never thought about it from this side. I guess I always kind of saw the relationship from Remus's POV, and never really gave much thought to what it must have been like for Sirius. Thanks!
You could say that. XD Well, I mostly wrote drabbles about them (shamefully, I have longer unfinished R/S projects on my hard drive, but they always got stuck on something and then I moved on), so it was easy to alternate and write this one from Sirius's perspective, this one from Remus's, this one as more of the old omniscient kind. (I've noticed that I usually take turns like this if I write more than one fic on a given pairing even when they're longer...) I can see why you might just prefer one of the POVs and stick with it, though. Glad this was interesting for you. :D
In terms of possible new pairings, it remains to be seen whether I'll be swayed towards Holmes/Watson this year. I must say it is quite an enticing thought! you're a very talented writer and this pairing can be used and re-used with no limits whatsoever.
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Mm, I really liked "In Fragments Unsettled" too. For my choice of DVD commentary I'm going to narrow down super-small on that fic to one word: "simple." I really loved the effect of that in the fic. Did you linger over the choice of the word or did it just come to you?
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I'm very pleased someone picked up on that (I also remember you already mentioned it back then, so even better). :D Yes, I lingered. Or rather, the conclusion "just came to me" once I'd reached it, but the word had already appeared earlier (I think the sentence was something like, Gellert always had it simple). What I wanted to get across was Albus's perspective in this part, since I had the shifting "POV" that wasn't so much of a POV in the long run, and to show the remoteness of his understanding of Gellert by that time. As far as he could tell, Gellert was simply the one who had once broken his trust and disappeared. In that section of the story, Albus is dwelling on that, perhaps expecting Gellert to be like himself in that there was "more" to it than what had happened. But then he concludes that, no, there was probably never "more" to Gellert because they were not alike, after all, which he had learned the hard way. Maybe he does it to justify leaving Gellert to "have it simple ( ... )
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Heh, well it was definitely one of my favorite things about the fic. Since seeing your explanating of how you meant this to work I think the first use of "simple" served the POV really well because it's obviously meant to be a kind of sneering, "You can rot in there for all I care," except more eloquently, and obliquely put. As you said, it's a safety mechanism, and it reveals Albus's state of mind.
Ooh, and I loved the ambiguousness of the final "simple." Firstly, in reference to the timing of it. Did he have it simple in his discussion with Voldemort? Or when he got AK'd? I like that you don't know exactly where the story ends. To me, the paragraph break implies that it's Gellert's death, but I like that there's a lack of stage direction there. No, "And then Voldemort raised his wand and Gellert had it simple."
Thanks for shedding more light on this. It was really cool to see your thoughts on it.
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That's just the effect I was going for! Seriously, if you asked where exactly the story ends, I couldn't give a definite answer either. Basically I love playing with interpretation, be it mine or the readers'. (By the way, "And then Voldemort raised his wand and Gellert had it simple" cracked me up. Really, I laughed just now.)
Glad to be of service. :D
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He remembers how he ended up in bed, naked, Remus’s fevered skin pressed against his, even though Azkaban has rendered his memory unreliable.
Tenderness blends with urgency as that familiar bond he shares with his old friend and lover comes alive. Remus gives him everything and takes equally much, until only pleasure remains and nothing matters anymore.
Just before he falls asleep, there’s an apologetic, “Sirius, I can’t stay much longer. Order business...”
He doesn’t care.
And when he awakes later, alone, a cold blanket tangled around him, he wonders when exactly Remus left and why he hadn’t told him.
I was in a R/S mood. :)
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It's even more depressing when elaborated on, heh. Sorry? XD
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I must say it is quite an enticing thought! you're a very talented writer and this pairing can be used and re-used with no limits whatsoever.
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