Comments | oroja: [Fanfic] Disturbia

oroja

[Fanfic] Disturbia

Apr 27, 2009 17:38

Title: Disturbia
Pairings: Tomapi, Pin (friendship), Ryopi (friendship)
Genre: angst
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: I own those guys only in my imagination.
Summary: How would you act if you love someone too much?
Notes: Toma in this fic is different from his usual self, he's struggling and even if he don’t want to, he’s hurting peoples he loves. But ( Read more... )

ryopi, one-shot, pin, tomapi

Comments 32

anonymous April 27 2009, 17:44:39 UTC

As far as the story goes, you're ok at writing :)

But I have a hard time seeing Toma as the abusive boyfriend. That's too OOC. Maybe if it was switched?

oroja April 27 2009, 17:58:26 UTC

thank you :)

about toma... he's always so happy that i thought that it would be good if he had "dark side” and somehow i wrote about it :)

nitroenka April 27 2009, 19:18:50 UTC

haha w końcu to umieściłaś <3
pi kiedyś tam powiedział, że jest słabą stroną tomy więc czaje o co ci chodziło
jest super :)

oroja April 28 2009, 03:54:17 UTC

dzięki wielkie :)
zawsze mogę na tobie polegać

ramadiii April 27 2009, 20:45:55 UTC

The storyline is amazing! Am I to expect a sequel? *pleads to god for a sequal*

Hehe <3

oroja April 28 2009, 03:56:37 UTC

i never thought about it... maybe some day in far, far galaxy... ;)

and thank you for reading :)

muymuy28 April 28 2009, 00:37:06 UTC

Toma Do-S? heehee

ahh~ Ryo not the nose! ouch!

Tomapi dorama... whoopee! wish it comes true!

**“Don’t leave me… not again…” An imploring plead.**
huhuhuhuhu... have tears in my eyes

happy ending but this made me sad... **Because now I know how to say goodbye.**
hope that Tomapi will never have to say goodbye to each other. T_T

more Tomapi puhrese!

oroja April 28 2009, 04:07:43 UTC

yeah, i wondered about ending... maybe i should end it in other way but like this it is pi who has last words...

and yes sir! i will wrote something really soon xD

kynseidk April 28 2009, 02:54:08 UTC

THIS-- is very new to me. Toma being Sousuke-like? uwa, never knew that was possible since, you know, Toma IS shared by A LOT OF PEOPLE. interesting take on the possessive thing, but yeah, probably OOC. :)

thank you for sharing!! *gives cookies* TOMAPI writers should always be encouraged.

oroja April 28 2009, 04:03:15 UTC

you know, i was worried when i wrote this, but toma still can be the same funny guy, it’s just that love and fear made him like this. i seriously love them together

i remembered when toma and pi celebrate pi’s birthday together and i thought why… and this is the results.

than you for reading... and for cookies xD