BtVS - Fic: Among Many

[oroborusfox]

Sanaa

She likes to draw. Pencil, lead only, she’s not good with colours. She’s tried charcoal but it smudges too much. And now it really is a blessing, pencils are still readily available, and all she needs in one and any piece of paper.

She sketches whatever she sees; furniture, views out the window, weapons - she particularly likes to

Comments

[dancesontrains]

Mmm...beautiful.
It's tricky to write convincing OCs, particularly in this fandom with canonical superpowered girls, and you've done a good job. &hearts

[oroborusfox]

Thank you very much, I was very unsure about this, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[electricalgwen]

I really like this!
You've beautifully detailed the different reactions from the different girls. Demi and Sanaa are my favourites; Demi in particular really tugs at the heartstrings. Claudia is also very poignant; that reaction had not occurred to me but it makes perfect sense.
I can't offer much in the way of concrit as I can't find much to criticize! Valerie is the only one that feels slightly... incomplete, maybe. It's clear what her reaction to the fear and threat is, and you've described her really well. I just feel like it doesn't quite have the solid ending/closing that the others do. (Carys in particular has a great ending.)
The language is clear and smooth. I think this is a great piece.

[oroborusfox]

Thanks so much, I really wasn't sure about this piece, so I'm glad people are enjoying it.

[kayla_holly]

I really like that. Even though they're not characters we ever see i think you have kept it in buffy-type character. Did that make sence? You can see these girls being the potentials.

Kayla

[oroborusfox]

Thanks, I'm glad they fit into the Buffyverse.

Thanks for commenting!

[yosso15]

I stumbled across this while community browsing ;). This fic was interesting deep and an interesting perspective to take, focusing on outsiders in S7, I love how you fleshed out their very solid characters in only a few paragraphs, great fic ;)

[oroborusfox]

Thank you, I have an interest in looking at outsiders within the Buffyverse (does that make sense?), so I'm relieved the characters felt real.

[deird1]

Wow. This is just excellent.

[oroborusfox]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.