Comments | orchid_falls: Soul Eater: press this and feel it crack

orchid_falls

Soul Eater: press this and feel it crack

Feb 25, 2009 18:32

So this is the fic that was started ages ago and would not go anywhere and then the other day just went off on one. It did originally start off quite plotty, as in it had one, then the smut entered and yeah...

Title: Press This And Feel It Crack
Character/Pairing: Giriko centric, GirikoxJustin, Girikoxanyone
Rating: To be safe I'm gonna say NC-17
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fanfic, soul eater, girikoxjustin, giriko

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orchid_falls February 25 2009, 20:31:16 UTC

Thanks for reading.

insanityin3d February 25 2009, 22:24:43 UTC

Boy, do I love seeing more Justin/Giriko out there: it makes me all wiggly inside. X3

Very nice! I love how you break it up into little sections, like you're only giving us a small frame, a few moments of the whole big picture.

I will say that there were a few sentences that left me a bit confused: just work on your wording and make sure everything flows perfectly. Example: your ideas flow together beautifully but the sentence structure itself could use some tweaking here and there.

And one more thing: I APPLAUD you for writing in present tense. It can be such a pain to write in it sometimes (I've attempted) so you don't see it much. I love it see it.

Overall, it was great. I'd LOVE to see more from you. :)

orchid_falls February 25 2009, 22:52:04 UTC

Thanks for reading and commenting!

And thanks especially for the crit. :D
Funnily enough, I find present a little easier most of the time.