Oh, this fic is beautiful. I love it. This line She lets her breath out sharply and turns around to look at him. He’ll always be like that, she thinks. Keep his kindness hidden away like a buried treasure he’s afraid you’ll steal. Guard it like a troll with a club. And then hand you a piece when you least expect it. is amazing. Looking forward to more!
Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm very glad that you're enjoying the story. It was a great experience writing the lines you pointed out - it took a few days for the words to come and arrange themselves in the proper order :-)
Another beautiful chapter! This is my favorite part:
He is matter-of-fact as he calmly relates one traumatic event after another. He could be talking about a recent vacation. She’s heard him do this kind of thing before, and she knows that he’s taking a perverse pleasure in demonstrating his indifference. But he’s not indifferent - she knows that, too. He’s holding his emotions strongly in check, and daring her to try and make him show her that he feels something.
There is so much pain between these two. I hope they can get past it and find their way back to each other again.
The forum version needed so much editing that I'm spending almost as much time on the story now as I did originally. It took me a little while to get used to the way things are done in LJ, but now I think it's an easier environment to work in. I'm not making an material changes, but I finally learned how to punctuate dialogue - so that means I have a lot of mistakes to correct - just like House and Stacy :-)
She lets her breath out sharply and turns around to look at him. He’ll always be like that, she thinks. Keep his kindness hidden away like a buried treasure he’s afraid you’ll steal. Guard it like a troll with a club. And then hand you a piece when you least expect it.
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She lets her breath out sharply and turns around to look at him. He’ll always be like that, she thinks. Keep his kindness hidden away like a buried treasure he’s afraid you’ll steal. Guard it like a troll with a club. And then hand you a piece when you least expect it. is amazing. Looking forward to more!
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He is matter-of-fact as he calmly relates one traumatic event after another. He could be talking about a recent vacation. She’s heard him do this kind of thing before, and she knows that he’s taking a perverse pleasure in demonstrating his indifference. But he’s not indifferent - she knows that, too. He’s holding his emotions strongly in check, and daring her to try and make him show her that he feels something.
There is so much pain between these two. I hope they can get past it and find their way back to each other again.
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Fantastic!
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The forum version needed so much editing that I'm spending almost as much time on the story now as I did originally. It took me a little while to get used to the way things are done in LJ, but now I think it's an easier environment to work in. I'm not making an material changes, but I finally learned how to punctuate dialogue - so that means I have a lot of mistakes to correct - just like House and Stacy :-)
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loved it!
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