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jen_nsync_landl in open_on_sunday

Service prompt: The Mentor and Service Calls

Jan 20, 2010 23:55

( The Mentor )

buffybot, spike, faith, potential / slayer, btvs5, buffy

Comments 23

rebcake January 21 2010, 06:21:00 UTC

Two beauts!

The praise was unexpected. Gah! Faith is used to getting the fuzzy end, poor dear.

What a horror show (on so many levels) in the second one. Mourning Spike + broken Bot, seeking "service" = nightmare scenario.

Well done. Might want to fiddle with the cut (damn LJ!).

jen_nsync_landl January 21 2010, 06:33:18 UTC

Does it still look wonky? My God, I have spent more minutes than I care to admit trying to get this bloody thing formatted properly! LOL I can't for the life of me figure out why this is so difficult - the laptop is shiny and new! What's with these glitches?! ;) *glares*

Re: your comments - that first one was so much longer in the first incarnation, and I worried that I'd cut the heart out of it in whittling it down. But you found its heart after all. Look at Buffy and Faith - they're both growing! :)

And yes, re: #2, it's me back in the summer of grief because I cannot stay away and because that was the very first thing that popped into my head when I saw the prompt. I've been so busy getting ready for school that I couldn't punch it out until now.

xc_runner50 January 21 2010, 07:10:05 UTC

I love these. Buffy and Faith seem to be doing the mature thing I keep hearing people talk about. Maybe it isn't so bad after all?

Is it OK that I shivered on that second prompt? Because that sure invoked some emotions in me. The OMGOMG Buffy's arm...oh shit the bot. Right...Awww poor Spike.

jen_nsync_landl January 21 2010, 13:35:12 UTC

Buffy and Faith seem to be doing the mature thing I keep hearing people talk about. Maybe it isn't so bad after all?

:D Still working on it myself.

The OMGOMG Buffy's arm...oh shit the bot. Right...Awww poor Spike.

Wow. So that's pretty much exactly what I was going for. I thought about putting more of a descriptor in the setting that would actually mention the bot and realized that I'd be taking out the "twist" out if I did. Your reaction was why I didn't give more away. Thank you for letting me know!

alwaysjbj January 21 2010, 09:37:22 UTC

Both fabulous. I really like the first one...nice to see Faith becoming a valued and respected member of the team. It's good for her and for Buffy!

jen_nsync_landl January 21 2010, 13:36:53 UTC

I think so, too. I like the idea that they could get to a supportive place. :)

kindredspirit75 January 21 2010, 11:16:53 UTC

Excellent use of the prompt, honey. I really like the second one. Very creepy encounter with the bot.

jen_nsync_landl January 21 2010, 13:38:19 UTC

Thanks so much. There certainly is an element of creepiness in the second that I hadn't originally intended but found its way in by the end.

jamalov29 January 21 2010, 12:16:24 UTC

Both are lovely ! I have a fondness for the second one and the sadness that I felt sharply in Spike's words.

jen_nsync_landl January 21 2010, 13:41:36 UTC

You know, I played with his comment a bit (although that whole drabble took about 2 minutes to write; the first was a much longer drafting process! His words were about the only thing that changed from the first draft to posting) and tried to make it fit both that moment with the bot and the broader summer arc of his sense of responsibility for what happened to Buffy on the tower. I'm glad the final product reflected that sadness that I was going for (if you can be glad for sadness? It's early here; my brain may not be working!).