Oh, this is such a refreshing break from the angst. And I'm always always on the lookout for good Peter/Olivia fluff. There is not enough good fluff out there.
I like that you included the detail about how lakes have a sense of foreboding for him. And this paragraph is just so Peter to me:
Peter likes her, in a togetherness sort of way that freaks him out a little. He's not the kind of person who spends a lot of time with any one person. There's no point. People aren't the kind of thing one can trust, and he'd just about written off the concept. He doesn't stay in one place, and he definitely doesn't stay with one person.
Gah, and the accidental touch and kiss and them getting this chance to be carefree and happy together is just so sweet to see and you wrote it in such a lovely fashion. I very much enjoyed.
I think there's a great lighthearted goofy side to Peter, and I hadn't written him before, so I wanted to see what it was like to fall in love with someone like Olivia.
black licorice is a truly lovely way to describe. thanks again. :)
This is just... it's happy and light and it shouldn't really work for Olivia/Peter, except that it should (because they do have their goofy moments, every once in a great while) and it does.
I stopped to re-read this line: She laughs, quickly, lightly, and today, just for today, he'll destroy the world himself if anyone ruins it because it's just so wonderful.
And the paragraph someone else already quoted about 'togetherness'. Love that paragraph, and the one after it.
Flirting over washing dishes is just so... domestic and cute and awwww.
And, wow, that kiss? Yum.
Lovely story, hon! I am all happy and smiley now. =D Definitely one to come back to when I need a pick-me-up. :)
They need to smile. They do have it in them, there are moments...and deep down Broyles is a huge romantic who wants them to be happy. It could happen. *nods*
You just turned me into a fourteen year old girl again. How was this so much fun? So real, so Peter and Olivia, and yet so much fun?! I loved the drive. I loved the moments. I love how I didn't expect anything to happen as much as they didn't, until it actually happened.
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My prompt did lead towards happy things. I like fireworks. :)
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.
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I like that you included the detail about how lakes have a sense of foreboding for him. And this paragraph is just so Peter to me:
Peter likes her, in a togetherness sort of way that freaks him out a little. He's not the kind of person who spends a lot of time with any one person. There's no point. People aren't the kind of thing one can trust, and he'd just about written off the concept. He doesn't stay in one place, and he definitely doesn't stay with one person.
Gah, and the accidental touch and kiss and them getting this chance to be carefree and happy together is just so sweet to see and you wrote it in such a lovely fashion. I very much enjoyed.
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I wanted them to have something accidental and special and painless. So much of their lives is so hard...
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I think there's a great lighthearted goofy side to Peter, and I hadn't written him before, so I wanted to see what it was like to fall in love with someone like Olivia.
black licorice is a truly lovely way to describe. thanks again. :)
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I stopped to re-read this line: She laughs, quickly, lightly, and today, just for today, he'll destroy the world himself if anyone ruins it because it's just so wonderful.
And the paragraph someone else already quoted about 'togetherness'. Love that paragraph, and the one after it.
Flirting over washing dishes is just so... domestic and cute and awwww.
And, wow, that kiss? Yum.
Lovely story, hon! I am all happy and smiley now. =D Definitely one to come back to when I need a pick-me-up. :)
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They need to smile. They do have it in them, there are moments...and deep down Broyles is a huge romantic who wants them to be happy. It could happen. *nods*
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You just turned me into a fourteen year old girl again. How was this so much fun? So real, so Peter and Olivia, and yet so much fun?! I loved the drive. I loved the moments. I love how I didn't expect anything to happen as much as they didn't, until it actually happened.
This was perfect.
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I wanted something pointless and normal, so a drive it was and bless them, they totally thought they were just friends. *pats them*
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