Comments | onyxhawke: Does your book sound like this?

onyxhawke

Does your book sound like this?

Feb 13, 2009 13:51

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If so, revising may be a good idea.

Thank you Darius.

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metafrantic February 13 2009, 19:03:05 UTC

"Rockwell Automation Retro Encabulator" should only be said in the voice of Marvin the Martian.

onyxhawke February 13 2009, 19:53:47 UTC

:-)

I don't know, that guy who used to do all those movie commercials might be able to pull it off. Or Yoda, and Samuel L Jackson, those two can do no wrong.

metafrantic February 13 2009, 19:59:13 UTC

Yoda?

"Here now, the future is, with the Rockwell Automation Retr- the Rockwell Auto-

"Oh hell. What shit is this, paying me to hawk, you are?"

metafrantic February 13 2009, 20:00:24 UTC

...uh, of course, that should say "...paying me to hock..."

*headdesk*

Rockwell Automation Retro Encabulator bigbananaslug February 13 2009, 20:55:59 UTC

Some of the senior PR people at RA don't know whether to sh*t or fly when somebody pulls this oldie-but-goodie off YouTube and shows it at a conference. I was tempted to when I keynoted the Rockwell Automation Pulp and Paper User Group on Monday, but I chickened out.

Re: Rockwell Automation Retro Encabulator onyxhawke February 13 2009, 21:27:39 UTC

Being the SOB that I am, i'd have used it to launch a perfectly sober speech, but then I am a SOB. :-)

cedunkley February 14 2009, 01:38:17 UTC

That is priceless.