i running down the sidewalk wish i could have fun in the sun i was sweating like a huge pig my skin as sweaty as you could get
i passed some boys, i waved at them they waved back, strange faces they gave i ran by, not caring at all i went to the mall, to meet some friends
i shopped til i dropped, bought gifts for my relatives when suddenly of food i caught a wift of th food court, and I ran to it as i did, i sorted all my presents.
my exciting day, that was it did you follow all the strange ways? as British would say, "I was knackered" did you know my day was backwards?
The poem itself I really didn't like much, but I loved the unique twist it has... it's a challange to read.
The poems content was just... I dunno... very 8th grade homework style poetry. Just sort of told a story word for word about going to the mall. Nothing deep, meaningful, symbolic or anything like that.
Overall, I give it a 6 solely for the interest use of knackered writting.
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i running down the sidewalk
wish i could have fun in the sun
i was sweating like a huge pig
my skin as sweaty as you could get
i passed some boys, i waved at them
they waved back, strange faces they gave
i ran by, not caring at all
i went to the mall, to meet some friends
i shopped til i dropped, bought gifts for my relatives
when suddenly of food i caught a wift
of th food court, and I ran to it
as i did, i sorted all my presents.
my exciting day, that was it
did you follow all the strange ways?
as British would say, "I was knackered"
did you know my day was backwards?
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The poems content was just... I dunno... very 8th grade homework style poetry. Just sort of told a story word for word about going to the mall. Nothing deep, meaningful, symbolic or anything like that.
Overall, I give it a 6 solely for the interest use of knackered writting.
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