home run

[ex_argh]

Title: home run
Author: argh (@ oneuldo)
Rating: PG-13
Length: 667
Pairing: Jonghyun/Onew
Summary/Notes: JongYu is 'watermelon line' so uh this was inspired by that pairing name and my favourite scene in Triple, where Joongki kissed Haru. Yeah I know, this is far too inspired by triple. Probably only really makes sense if you've seen Triple :/ ^^;; Really I

Comments

[onewlurver]

Unni, for this being less than 20 minutes you did a pretty good job ^^ Not to be extremely critical, but the story line was a little off (as in there were a few gaps) but the plotline wasn't the main point of this fic so it's ok :D /stoned from criticism

FAVORITE PART:
Jinki blindly reached for a piece of watermelon, his hand inching across the wooden decking, he smiled as one finger touched the edge of the plate. Jinki gazed up at the bright stars, unable to stop smiling, he really had missed his hometown, his fingers reaching for the juicy, sweet slice of watermelon. The brush of warm fingers against his, made Jinki freeze, eyes blinking almost desperately up at the stars and moon, as he felt the warm pad of a finger run across his fingertips.

- And by the way, you are the most amazing, gentle, sweet, caring unni on the whole planet and I'm so incredibly lucky to have you ^^

[ex_argh]

I swear I replied to this ;_________________________; but apparently not?! :G

okay (: I shall edit this. I did kind of want it to be vague, kind of open and more implied. And yeah it probably only makes sense if you've seen Triple /corner

I guess because triple is like engraved in my head *fail* to me the plot was easy to follow D: but I shall edit this ♥ and fix it up bb~ so you can except a revised version for your bday (and other stuff bb^^;) ♥

And bb, never stop giving me criticism okay? (: I love your criticism ;_; I love your comments (I love you 8D)
saranghae bb and thank you ;_; for commenting ♥ I really appreciate and love all of your comments even if I am slow to reply ;_;

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saranghae my darling, adorable dongsaeng~ ♥

[onewlurver]

It's ok ^^ Sorry for my nativeness and not knowing about Triple XP Awwww unni you don't have to do ANYTHING for me ^W^

And I'll continue to give you the most constructive criticism possible ^^ And you know I will be completely honest as well :D

Nado my amazing, gentle, caring, brilliant unni ~♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥~

[ex_argh]

Naivete? You meant? Not nativeness right? Don't be sorry bb, its my fault. I should have made it easier to understand coz it should work whether you've seen the drama or not D:

But I want to~ I want to make my sweet dongsaeng happy. If you tell me what pairings you like from... DBSK? I'll try to write something for that too? Although I know NOTHING about any of them^^;

thank you bb, honesty is super impt to me T_T;
♥ saranghae my sweet darling dongsaeng (:

[shinyshawol]

aww <3

[oneu]

XDD not my otp~ so this was kind of hard to write^^; but thanks for the aww~ :P

[chansai_unmyong]

i know its weird having a 2013 comment to a 2011 post.. LOL... but im posting anyway..

i miss the watermelon pair... and as far as ontae has been on my 2nd OTP, jongyu's catching up fast.. IDEK why.. XD

and this is sweet! ^^ jonghyun you punk! stealing a kiss..! haha...

and this was written in 20 minutes??? WOW!!! O_O

[yapikao]

NO ITS NOT WEIRD !!!!!!!!!!!! its nice :D miwi likey~ miwi likey a lot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

roughly? XD miwi is fast 8D at this time I was challenging myself to write as fast as possible in as little time (writing exercise) lol....

XD ♥ :D

*sneezes all over you* :D