\o/ Awww bb! So sweet as always~ <333 I'll say it again- I love this! (I love it a little bit extra cause you wrote it for me ;-;) But it captures everything I wanted. ty! <33
“Onew-ssi,” he smirked, “How are you? It’s been a while, I’ve missed you.” he murmured softly, leaning in close. Jinki forced himself to keep smiling and nodding his head slightly.
whaaat. he wasn't nodding his head before, was he?
Jinki’s fingers trembled slightly, and it took all his efforts not to crush or rip the photos to little shreds. He tried to tell himself that the photos were some kind of misunderstanding, but the images were seared into his brain. No matter how much he tried to tell himself they were meaningless, he could not help but think they were meaningful. He felt so hurt and stunned, and it took all his efforts to act normal.
Um, why is he reacting that strongly? o___O It's weird.
He could barely move. He could barely focus on anything but the image of the photos in his brain, the image of his boyfriend hugging and almost kissing a girl, and the image of the love of his life sneaking around behind his back with someone else.
Oh. Ooooooohhhhhh. Good timing.
There had been no late night kisses. In fact, he had
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THANK YOU THANK YOU FOR THIS COMMENT~ ♥♥♥ you know I _really_ appreciate it! ♥♥♥
I think I went through and fixed up all the things you mentioned here T_T but tbh I'm kind of at a loss to where I should cut stuff out? Since you said its a little slow and has too much detail? /fails
anyway thank youuu so much for pointing out all these little problems/mistakes 8D I've posted an edited version although it probably still needs more work T_T /sigh
Of course not! The best part of fics are figuring out the plots and the tension that follows from being involved with the characters. I honest-to-goodness have no criticisms for this fic. The development and relationships between the characters was superb, and the mystery/conflict/tension/desperation between Jinki and Minho's relationship was probably my favorite thing about the whole thing ^^ I hope that answered your question ^W^ I finished it, and of course it was mother fucking fantastic ^^
Oh really T~T *stunned* oh I heard it was too long-winded lol. XD
But thank you bb for your honest opinion /cry I really appreciate it. (: And I'm glad you like the mystery/conflict/tension/desperation in their relationship.
^^; and what about the smut? And the whipping scene? Did they seem okay or kind of meh? D:
spot for me. i am so dead right now, it's not funny. need sleep badly. remind me to come read this though, because i'm so beat, i might not remember this come morning.
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I'll say it again- I love this! (I love it a little bit extra cause you wrote it for me ;-;) But it captures everything I wanted. ty! <33
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thank you ;_; and I'm glad you requested it^^; because yeah I actually enjoyed writing it XDDDD (esp the whipping scene LOL)
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whaaat. he wasn't nodding his head before, was he?
Jinki’s fingers trembled slightly, and it took all his efforts not to crush or rip the photos to little shreds. He tried to tell himself that the photos were some kind of misunderstanding, but the images were seared into his brain. No matter how much he tried to tell himself they were meaningless, he could not help but think they were meaningful. He felt so hurt and stunned, and it took all his efforts to act normal.
Um, why is he reacting that strongly? o___O It's weird.
He could barely move. He could barely focus on anything but the image of the photos in his brain, the image of his boyfriend hugging and almost kissing a girl, and the image of the love of his life sneaking around behind his back with someone else.
Oh. Ooooooohhhhhh. Good timing.
There had been no late night kisses. In fact, he had ( ... )
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I think I went through and fixed up all the things you mentioned here T_T but tbh I'm kind of at a loss to where I should cut stuff out? Since you said its a little slow and has too much detail? /fails
anyway thank youuu so much for pointing out all these little problems/mistakes 8D I've posted an edited version although it probably still needs more work T_T /sigh
but thank you for your help :D ♥
XD hope you feel better soon bb~♥
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i'm upset i was on the edge of my seat ): i love your fanfiction ;o;
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I just made a blank entry for it! XDDDD
thank you^^; ♥
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I mean the angst/conflict is just so great and I can't wait to read part 2!
*goes off to read*
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I hope that answered your question ^W^
I finished it, and of course it was mother fucking fantastic ^^
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But thank you bb for your honest opinion /cry I really appreciate it. (: And I'm glad you like the mystery/conflict/tension/desperation in their relationship.
^^; and what about the smut? And the whipping scene? Did they seem okay or kind of meh? D:
thank you bb T_____T;
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*hugs* hope you sleep well & get plenty of rest bb~
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