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Needed Courage to Post This

Feb 21, 2013 14:02

Title: Not that Different at All
Prompt: Black and White
Media: Fic
Characters: Usopp. Zoro, lil bit of Chopper, Robin and Luffy
Rating: T
Word Count: 297
Warning: Mentions of racial discrimination (please don't kill me)

( It looked the same to him )

character: nico robin, character: chopper, fiction, character: monkey d. luffy, character: usopp, crew: strawhats, character: zoro

Comments 6

tortilla_lady February 22 2013, 03:27:17 UTC

Very well done! I love at the end the thought of the crew starting a revolution for the better on that island (like they would even if one of their nakama hadn't been targeted). I like! ^_^

jadekitty777 February 22 2013, 05:21:20 UTC

A-Aaah! *squirms happily* Thank you so much!

And yeah they totally would xD The Straw Hats are awesome like that

printfogey February 22 2013, 07:17:45 UTC

Oh yeah, it did cross my mind whether anyone would go this route. We haven't seen any skin colour-based discrimination in the One Piece world, but it could easily exist at least on some islands - and if so, the Strawhats' reaction is very much in character! ♥

jadekitty777 February 22 2013, 08:21:45 UTC

Hehe to be honest, I've been wanting to write a piece like this for awhile (omg I'm awful) so this prompt was the perfect way for me to work with it! I'm always so... awfully intrigued by Usopp's ethnicity... (Still awful)
And I'm glad you think so 8D I try very hard to keep everyone in character but I feel I come up short most times xD;; Thanks so much!

stelra_etnae February 22 2013, 07:57:46 UTC

Wow, this was really meaningful.
I like how you made his hand the main focus of the story. It really has impact, especially in this line "It was a helpful hand; one he hadn’t realized held any difference from anyone else."
And when that hand became "a brave warrior's fist" at the end, it was a nice touch, symbolising both Usopp's growth and the resolution of the conflict.
Racial discrimination is truly the most irrational social problem we have now. Why look at a person's skin colour, when what truly matters is inside?
Great work!

jadekitty777 February 22 2013, 08:54:24 UTC

A-aaah <33! You're making me blush! Thank you 8D
Oooh, I'm glad you picked up on that. I rewrote so many sentences to get that last bit to fit (and then ended up having extra words anyways after all the revisions lol). I thought it was a nice way to end it ^^.
Totally random comment here: Since every word counts, I love how drabbles really make me work so hard xD I can't believe how many times I can rewrite the same sentences in different ways.
And, heh, sadly isn't any discrimination like that?

Thanks for reading and giving me such a lovely review!