Penelope

Jul 11, 2007 03:24

Title: Penelope
Date posted: 07-11-07
Fandom: Pirates of the Caribbean
Disclaimer: It all belongs to the Mouse.
Spoilers: All three movies.
Notes: Definite Norribeth tendencies.

Penelope )

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sunshine_queen July 12 2007, 18:05:10 UTC
Aww, glad you like it! Jack totally would totally be unorthodox and considerate. It's just how it rolls, man.

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dollsome July 11 2007, 19:18:03 UTC
She takes a lover the fifteenth year, a local young carpenter whose hands are rough and callused, like every man she's ever known. It feels healthy to feel someone's else's hands on her, and he leaves her sated. She rarely sees his face for what it is- he's forever shapeshifting into her far-away husband, Jack Sparrow, and with increasing frequency, James.

(Will's techniques are the only man she knows intimately. She assumes that Jack would be a considerate, if unorthodox, lover. It's James her mind fixates on. She pictures him, his crisp uniform, his profile in the sun, his fine posture. Would he have been quick and efficient, or hungry? She can see the look in his eyes he had in the last years of their acquaintance, the way he watched her, tightly coiled and waiting for the least sign. She thinks maybe his adoration would have overwhelmed her, but in the manner of a warm wave when the shore was close- a rolling, breathtaking moment beneath and the blessed feeling of powdered sand before wishing you were being turned over again.) ( ... )

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sunshine_queen July 12 2007, 18:07:19 UTC
I didn't realize the Penelope thing until I was reading, and then I was like, totally stunned that I hadn't thought of it before. And really, their relationship had to deteriorate, becauase one day once a decade? Kind of a lot to ask.

Also, awesome idea to post at the comm, so thanks, pal.

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Well done indeed! julianna2002 July 12 2007, 01:00:33 UTC
I came across your wonderful fic on the Norribeth journal and may I just say that it is absolutely beautiful! The imagery was breath-taking and the story parallels ver, very well done.

I too love the idea that she transitioned her "love" to Will because it would have been easier to be with a boy rather than being on much more uneven ground with an experienced and worldly man.

The whole only one day every ten years storyline is really impossible, isn't it? Who could make that work? The loneliness would be suffocating.

Brilliantly done, and I sincerely hope that you post more POTC fics! I would love to read them!

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Re: Well done indeed! sunshine_queen July 12 2007, 18:09:41 UTC
You're right about the loneliness being suffocating- and the pressure of being expected to remain faithful, and the guilt, and :(. Poor Liz.

Thanks for reading!

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commodore_lydia July 12 2007, 01:00:49 UTC
*is speechless*

Thank you so much for posting this to the norribeth community - I never would have found this otherwise!

In an attempt to be coherent ...

I love the connections you draw between Elizabeth and Penelope/ Will and Odysseus. This is a completely fitting way for Elizabeth and Will to part ways and fall out of love - the gradual split because of the distance and a final goodbye.

(When did she become so old in relation to him? He tends to the dead, she raised a son. She is tired of the house that aches with loneliness, her pillow sodden with tears, the echoes of poor choices and a life that she gave up. He looks so young.)

She tells him not to.

That is absolutely pitch-perfect. This whole fic is more gorgeous than my meager vocabulary can describe. Beautifully, beautifully done!

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sunshine_queen July 12 2007, 18:13:20 UTC
I'm glad you liked it! I felt a bit odd separating Will/Liz (not because I ship them, but because... usually I like the OTP and breaking up what the writers intended kind hurts me) but really, how could it work? How?

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geekmama July 12 2007, 01:12:27 UTC
The classical allusions are very apt, and incorporated with great dexterity. Really beautiful writing here.

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sunshine_queen July 12 2007, 18:21:01 UTC
Thank you so much!

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