wake us in the valley of the sun

[springtides]

wake us in the valley of the sun
inception: arthur/eames/robert
pre-film and post-film
pg13, 6839 wc
wanting is hunger. these men are the starving.
a/n basically i wrote this because i was thinking about what would have happened if 1. arthur and eames were the ones who trained robert fischer and have nothing to do with cobb or the team, and 2. the

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[springtides]

eeeee thank you ♥ i'm really happy that you appreciated the a/e/f setup, it was a spot of anxiety for me when writing (robert was initially going to be a sort of side dish to the a/e. then as the story evolved, eames ended up being the side dish. oops).

once again, thank you! ♥

[clair3]

absolutely brilliant!

[koushi]

You write sooo beautifully. I can't get over the little nuances and turns-of-phrase that you use, to say so much with so little. And I think you handled the relationship dynamic between the three of them very well, too. Overall, it is a lovely, dreamlike atmosphere done amazingly. (And this is coming from someone who is not a fan of any combination of pairings within this threesome. :P But I was recced this fic by fabiennen and don't regret it!)

I'm not sure if you want concrit, but if you do, I think at the beginning, when they were at the restaurant in the Piazza, there were some tense-shifts (present when it should have been past, mostly). Also you said "focussing" at one point. Personally, I found the disjointedness a little hard to follow at the beginning, but I see that it was intentional and that it all started to come together toward the end. It's so different from my own style and any that I'm used to reading that it was really refreshing. :D

[springtides]

thank you! i love concrit, it means a lot to me when people take the time to give it :3 so thank you for that! going to go over the piazza section, i changed tenses in it about three times, so that's probably why. my bad. and i'll keep your point about disjointedness in mind for next time too. thank you again!