Summer Fest 2010: Fiction Submission (4/4)

[santebayo]

Comments

[anonymous]

I am just absolutely blown away by this.

Incredible.

[erisabesu]

^////^ Thank you!

[nivell]

MY GOD. What an awesome story! Thank you so much for writing this!

[erisabesu]

Oh gosh, you're welcome! <3 Thank you for reading! :D

[anonymous]

Slow commenter is slow, but holy wow, this was fantastic. It was tense and unrelenting from the very first passage, right through Hibari's discovery of the crimes--each and every one--all the while, as a reader, knowing that it was Mukuro manipulating Yamamoto, and watching on painfully as Hibari figures out the same thing

[erisabesu]

I have to take a moment to collect myself after a comment like this--it's such a compliment to hear that you experienced a lingering effect after reading. Thank you so much for sharing that with me! <3

I'm also so pleased that you could sympathize with (and believe) Hibari's emotional struggles. I think that he builds walls and rejects complications as a protection against pain, just as you say, and yet I also think that his ties to people can run deep.

Thank you so much for the amazing feedback! I'm quite humbled. <333

[anonymous]

I've held off commenting on this, because it deserves more than key smashing and words that aren't even words. Unfortunately, my reaction is still alkjdflajfljaslfkja GUH! I loved it. It was similar to a horror film in that I kept wanting to yell at Hibari to run DOWN the stairs not up and to pay attention to that damn smell! lol It was a great ride, and even though we knew Yamamoto was being controlled, the reasons were an interesting twist. And I do love that Chrome did what she needed to do as painlessly as possible, because I do feel she would try to do so. But wow, that's a lot to put people through for the sake of training. :(

Hibari and Yamamoto's reactions to having their world flipped upside down are so justified. And I love how it's a fight at the end that finally helps them bridge the gap all this has formed. Love it!

Curry of Life

[erisabesu]

Good grief, thank you so much for the wonderful feedback--I'm humbled that this has left such an impact on you. <333 Funny that you mention horror films, because I actually had a long string of nightmares during the writing of this story, heh. I'm glad that the characters' motivations rang true, and that you could sympathize with all that had happened. <333 I have the hugest smile on my face now!

Thank you again for such lovely comments! *smooch*

[anonymous]

Fandom does this series so well. ;3;

The push and pull for control and dominance by the characters made this a great read. You are amazing for pulling out an epic like this. ♥

-Tracksuit

[erisabesu]

Thank you so much! <333 ^////^ I think I died a little writing this, lol, so I'm ecstatic that you enjoyed the (massive) read. Your comment is much appreciated!