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Entry 05, Intruder

Oct 05, 2011 22:45

Title: Intruder
Entry Number: 05
Author: dtsguru
Fandom: original
Rating: PG-13 (for some language)
Genre: urban fantasy
Spoiler Warnings: none
Word Count: 1761

This is set in ‘The Family’ ‘verse. Self beta’d so all mistakes most definitely are mine.

( Entry 05 )

original, 2011, 5

Comments 6

latemarch October 6 2011, 04:23:24 UTC

Okay, I think that we're all pretty damn desperate to find out the exact details between Cass and Greg. You keep throwing these little tidbits out that have us resembling a slavering pack of dogs! I want to know about the logistics of two 12 year olds getting married?! Holy cow.

Also, I'm very interested in April now too. So...just keep that in mind. Hint: more April! =D

dtsguru October 6 2011, 11:11:26 UTC

There will be more April. :)

As to Cass and Greg's marriage. Part of that is buried here and there. In the 'Ties That Bind': Joe-"But you knew the consequences of breaking your word. Every child of the Family is taught to guard their tongue until they can control their talents." Fairly common theme in magic/wizards/etc stories, the power our words, our promises have over us. I do plan to go more into their back story though.

goddessofbirth October 6 2011, 22:06:01 UTC

Oh, nice! So, is it just that she knows things, or that she sees bonds? Can't wait to find out...

ippoddity October 7 2011, 09:01:13 UTC

Things are getting even more interesting now! I agree with Chelsea, I'd like to know more about April! Why did she show up? What happened to her? How come she has so little control over her powers? So many questions! I eagerly await your next installment.

saraste_impi October 17 2011, 13:55:55 UTC

Ooh, very nice. I symphatized with Cass' vexation over the eaten German chocolate cake. Now want to eat said cake myself.

I really like the interactions of the characters, and your lovely underlying humour. I hope I won't offend if I say your style is reminiscent of Charlaine Harris' in a way.

And I want more. More, more, more. You just give tid-bits, explain things and then give new secrets for us to ponder. Excellent.

dtsguru October 17 2011, 23:14:07 UTC

I like Charlaine's sense of humor, so no offense taken.

Thanks for the kind comments.