Entry 05: Cross the Bridges of War (3)

[latemarch]

Title: Cross the Bridges of War
Entry Number: 5
Author: latemarch
Fandom: Original
Rating: PG
Genre: Historical, romance
Spoilers: none
Word Count: 1243
Author's notes: While most of you greatly outpace me in the posting department (yay! congrats!) I'm still only on entry 05! Connects directly to entries three and four.

Comments

[insaneladybug]

A very good installment, even though it may be more fillery. Very good stories need some filler to flesh scenes and characters out more. :)

I think I especially like the descriptions of how taxing it was to collect all the snow, getting hot and cold over and over. And the explanation of the uniform being in rags, because I definitely was puzzled as to why the uniform hadn't given away his country. ;) (Although I also wonder a bit why he hasn't been talking in German and giving it away that way....)

I noted a couple of minor typos, a comma for a period right at the beginning, and two different ways of saying the kitchen tap was frozen in the same sentence (ah, I've definitely had those typos happen before), but other than that, it looks fine to me! You must have patched things very well.

And that is one weird recurring dream. But at least you found you still had all those other words for your novel!

[latemarch]

Ah yes, that would be less me not writing carefully enough and more me not being able to type coherently when I’m about to fall asleep… I get determined to do things before the day is over and just keep going even if my vision is blurring out and usually there are typos. Oh well, I’ll fix them in the editing stage!

My theory is that he’s incoherent with fever, and that’s why she doesn’t realize he’s German. That makes sense, right? And I even figured out how to scoot around his name at first. He’ll be Maximilian, which is the German spelling, and she’ll only see M- or Max- or something and assume that it’s Maxilimien, which is the French spelling. I’m just trying to play as much off on assumption and misdirection as I can!

Anyway, yes, I had that dream Monday and Tuesday night, and it’s so weird because it’s a real comic book shop, and they have a promo spot in the Creepy Kofy Movie Time that I watch every Saturday night. I’m not sure how the two got mixed up, but I hope it doesn’t stick around!

[insaneladybug]

I know how that is! Sometimes I fight tooth and nail to stay awake long enough to write just a little bit more.

Yep, if he's never actually said a distinguishable word, it makes sense! Ha, I love how you're playing with everything, including the name. ;)

Wow. Definitely weird. I have different dreams with recurring settings, but I've never actually had a recurring dream. I always wonder what causes those!