Commentary: Age of Octans done, plus Chapter 5

[level_head]

Dola appears on stage, briefly, to take a last bow.

Chapter 5 has been updated to add a scene with her in it, and we learn where babies come from.

Thank you very much, my friends. I will still be tinkering with chapters -- 1 through 4 are updated as well -- and fixing a bit of chapter numbering confusion as we took out 3 but then later split 4

Comments

[deckardcanine]

I haven't looked at the updated chapters. It would help if you told me which lines were added.

[level_head]

I'll put together a comp-sheet for them.

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[level_head]

I have prepared an RTF file with the changes called out from the one you reviewed. At first impression, more than half of the paragraphs are changed, and the size of the chapter has expanded by something close to 50%.

I will email you the change list, if you send me an email address.

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[deckardcanine]

Sure: sgilberg@comcast.net