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oceansex

[fic post] Nevermore

Jan 30, 2011 00:12

Title: Nevermore
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Drama/Romance
Pairings or Characters: Kakashi/Sakura, Naruto/Sakura
Warnings: language, mentions of sex
Word Count: 2904
Summary: Naruto leaves and the village accepts his fate, but Sakura is having trouble coming to terms.
Author Notes: For kakasaku's Poe challenge, round three. SO. I WON LAST WEEK??? I don't even ( Read more... )

rating -- [pg-13], pairing -- kakashi/sakura, !fic, contest entry, naruto

Comments 15

surmise January 30 2011, 07:51:09 UTC

It's such a pleasure to be reading your stuff again. And so, so sad. CONGRATS ON WINNING, BY THE WAY? /needs to pay more attention

Kekeke. "Some girls like that." . . . Kekeke. <3

oceansex January 30 2011, 07:52:59 UTC

I will never not toss in a fujoshi joke. it's kind of obligatory, especially when I am THE BIGGEST slash tan ever, anyway.

and thank you bb ;o; <3

surmise January 30 2011, 07:54:51 UTC

It totally makes me giggle. Even though I'm not a slash fan. NARUSASU IS JUST CANON. And how you write it makes me wanna love it even though I don't. /is a biased bitch -- Just think of it as like. REVEY'S FICS MAKE NONBELIEVERS BELIEVE. Or something. |D

You're welcome, bb <3

a_lifestyle January 30 2011, 07:57:55 UTC

Oooh, girl, when I saw the submission poll close without your entry, my heart was like

oceansex January 30 2011, 08:00:33 UTC

I WAS FREAKING OUT BECAUSE I FORGOT THAT WHEN SHE SAYS MIDNIGHT, SHE MEANS MIDNIGHT EST AND HERE I WAS FINISHING AT MIDNIGHT IN MOUNTAIN TIME AND I WAS FLAILING AND PANICKING FOR A WHILE AT THE END THERE ;____;

but I got it turned in, I think I made it, I HOPE I MADE IT. O_____O

and I can't wait to read yours, but I'm TIRED so I think I'll wait until the morning when you've (hopefully) gotten LJ's formatting under control. XD <3

a_lifestyle January 30 2011, 08:41:17 UTC

PLZ WAIT, FORMATTING IS CRAY CRAY RIGHT NOW.

Okay, I think it's fixed. D:
Technology foils me again.

moldycookies January 30 2011, 15:20:56 UTC

:D

I'm gonna have such a hard time voting! Everyone's so good! AND FLUFFY. REALLY, REALLY FLUFFY. Like, Fluff!fluffy. I have to go to work in an hour so I'm delaying things as much as possible.

Ahem... anyways... This is so wonderful, by the way, congrats on winning! :D I read yours and was like "She's totally gonna win this one. Hands down, she's going to win." I loved yours. Like it was aww and AH?! and wtf and yay! and yeah... I'll stop fangirling now.

oceansex January 30 2011, 23:04:32 UTC

ahaha I hadn't thought of this as fluffy, but I guess it is, compared to my last two entries. XD

and thanks! but now that it's narrowing down to the best of the best plus me in this competition, I'm pretty sure I'm getting knocked out this round. I can't really hold out much hope of moving on when I'm reading all this awesomeness. T__T

moldycookies January 30 2011, 23:19:05 UTC

Pssshh, no. You'll make it.

oceansex January 30 2011, 23:23:50 UTC

I'm actually afraid to vote and see how poorly I'm doing, but thank you for your confidence XD

Thread 7

bluerising January 31 2011, 06:11:58 UTC

Oh man. A jealous Kakashi is always a fun Kakashi. I think it's really interesting how you made Naruto "the other man" for this story, and drew so much conflict from that point. He really turns into that unreachable, untouchable barrier to the relationship, especially with him being outside of the village. So it's understandable how Kakashi would become so frustrated and pained by the happenings of the story, and by how Sakura secretly pines so much for this other unreachable boy. Then even when she confesses the fact, and admits her confusing desire for both of them... how painful!

There are some very raw and intense emotions here that makes such a strong impact for the story. Especially in the end, when Kakashi quotes the phrase "Only this and nothing more" and we get that final sense of how their relationship was nothing more than substitute for what Sakura truly desired. Once again... the emotions here are RAW AND INTENSE.

Excellent work, Oceansex. I think you really rocked this prompt, and wish you the best of luck for the

a_lifestyle February 1 2011, 05:06:01 UTC

Ooh, guuuurl! I finally got to read this, and I like it a lot.

I loved that first moment when Sakura and Kakashi are in bed together and you realize that, whoa, they, they're in the bed together, and how much pain they're both experiencing from what it means to be together.

Almost had a heart attack:
"He promised me he would. He promised," she whispers, staring at the sink as she fills it with water.

"Even Naruto knows how to lie," Kakashi says flatly, and it makes her want to cry.

Sweet baby jesus, this moment was like, the entire fic in a nutshell for me.