[fic post] Tea and a Bit of Hospital Room

[oceansex]

Title: Tea and a Bit of Hospital Room
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Dark
Pairings or Characters: Kakashi/Sakura
Warnings: character death
Word Count: 1792
Summary: Today is the day he's lived a thousand times.
Author Notes: For kakasaku Poe challenge, round two.

Comments

[ivy_chan]

<8O

<8O!!!!

T_____T

THAT WAS MY FACE WHEN READING THIS ARGH. OH KAKASHI. OH SASUKE YOU UTTER ASSHOLE. I love dream weirdness and this slipping in and out of dream state motif, and it's done really well here. Oh, my heart.

[oceansex]

THOSE WERE THE FACES I WAS GOING FOR, so yay. even if it's because Sasuke is a huuuuuuuuuge dick and Kakashi has to suffer. I'm glad the dreaming style worked for you! thanks for reading <3

[gothirishrose]

Wow. This slammed me in my heart with a desperate ache for Kakashi. Good, hard-hitting story.

[oceansex]

thank you so much! :D

[surmise]

Read my keywords for my icon.

I. I think I held back literal tears, dear. It was beautiful, though. Insanely beautiful, including how you wrote it and dear lord. ♥

[oceansex]

/BRINGS YOU TISSUES

oh man I didn't mean to make anybody cry, but thank you ;_; <3

[flibbergibbet]

Oh oh ohhhhhhhh ;_;

I really like this. A lot. I think you really captured a dream-like feel, including things like having the grocery store underwater without any rhyme or reason because dreams are like that, and I like that Kakashi's aware of the dream and the way he interacts with the people in it, and how they interact with him, and the disconnect there.

I think my one critique would be this: the scene between Kakashi and Sasuke was kind of unclear to me. I'm normally perfectly okay with open-endedness in stories and being left to reach my own conclusions, but I wish there'd been a little more expansion of the backstory on this one. Particularly because I found it really fascinating!

Overall, though, ♥. This was definitely one of my favorites from this challenge!

[oceansex]

OKAY, SO, if you look at the timestamp of this entry, it was posted right at 10:00 (mountain time here; midnight over on the east coast, so right when it was due) and I basically scrambled to get to the poll before it closed. XD I VERY MUCH AGREE WITH EVERYTHING YOU SAID ABOUT THE SASUKE BIT! I left it way too vague (I know what happens in my head, but in my head doesn't exactly translate into clear and obvious hints on paper) and wanted to go back and fix it, but I figured, I'd turned it in, tinkering would be cheating. this is what happens when I push stuff until the deadline. I write fast, but then not everything that needs to be written gets written, so things get left all confusing.

anyway, I'm happy you pointed that out, because I didn't want to be the only one glaring at that section. ;_;

thanks for reading! <3

[a_lifestyle]

I liked this a lot! What a satisfying ending. I love the lucid-ness of the dreams and how routine it all feels. Really lovely atmosphere, well done!

[oceansex]

thank you so much! :D doing the dream bits were my favorite. playing with the day to day life of Kakashi and Sakura can be really fun (AND LOOK AT ME, I DIDN'T RIP IT OUT OF THE READER'S HANDS. I've already forgiven you but oh, the hurt, it's still here. ;_;)