Title: French Fries
Rating: G
Genre: Romance/Fluff
Pairings or Characters: Doumeki/Watanuki
Warnings: none
Word Count: 304
Summary: Doumeki is being frustrating and Watanuki is, one-hundred percent, not in denial. Honest.
Author Notes: I seem to love torturing myself. I HAVE SO MANY THINGS TO DO RIGHT NOW but all I'm doing is pumping out xxxHOLiC
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he'll come around. eventually. er, maybe.
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"Watanuki let the french fry fall from his fingertips as his jaw hung open and he stared blankly into the face of the young man who had just confessed to him."
This line feels kind of awkward; it'd probably flow better if you broke it up a bit or something.
"Doumeki picked up the fry he had dropped and poked his face with it."
lololol. In context, this is the best line ever, because it's just so incredibly matter-of-fact in comparison to the previous one, and I can just see how this would look if it were a comic. AND IT'S PRICELESS.
Of course Watanuki flounces off in the end. :D (Flounce, Watanuki! Flounce!)
I love this, and I love it hard. \o/
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and the french fry poke. I must admit, I'm very proud of that line. and imagining it in comic form is SO DAMN EASY. I love it. oh Doumeki, why so ADORABLE?
thanks for the feedback and glad you like bb! 8D <3
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IT'S PERFECT. (The men of the Doumeki-family aren't born, they're made. OF PURE AWESOME.)
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TRUFAX DESHOU.
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if that is not the most doumeki thing to do in the history of doumeki things, well, i don't know what is. because in context, asd;lfjsl it's just perfect.
and watababy is adorably flaily, as he alwaysalways should be, and his denial was particularly delicious. :D
THIS IS SO LOVELY~ :D
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But that was cute! I really liked the poking part. XD Sounds like what a girl would do, except Doumeki is...not a girl.
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glad you enjoyed! any opportunity for Doumeki to annoy Watanuki will be jumped upon with no hesitation, lol
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