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obsessive0514

Another Avatar fic.

Jul 04, 2008 02:08

Title: Tree (Best name I could come up with... Seriously.)
Author: obsessive0514
Word Count: 183
Rating: PG-13, to be safe?
Characters: Katara, Zuko
Warnings: Minor spoilers for The Western Air Temple, references to sexual violence, feeling vulnerable/helpless, basically. There's implications of rape being used as a weapon, too.
Summary: She reminds ( Read more... )

fanfiction, avatar: the last airbender

Comments 4

kirschreich July 4 2008, 13:18:19 UTC

Your story is beautifully written but I think you are putting too much of yourself out into the open where you are vulnerable. That's where the people who says "it's no big deal" come in. You open yourself wide to their silly (and totally uncalled for) comments and personally, I advice you to refrain from doing so.

I know a lot of people who have been sexually assaulted. I know victims of sexual abuse through parents, parents' best friends and other persons that should be trustworthy. I know women who just so got away without having been physically raped and I know women who's ordeal went on for years ( ... )

turtleyurtle1 July 4 2008, 18:31:17 UTC

I don't think I could say anything better then what Kirschreich said. I completely agree.

Any comments about that scene aren't meant to be taken seriously, and many people don't realize the deeper creepy factor of it. Just realize they don't or can't understand that.

It was a beautiful peice.

ivy_chan July 5 2008, 03:49:50 UTC

This really captures the emotions you wanted it to, I believe. It perfectly expressed Katara's fear of her own vulnerability. That scene was quite creepy, especially the expression on Zuko's face when he leaned close to her, invading her personal space, and spoke softly in her ear. It looked like his movements were orchestrated to make her feel that way, something I can't quite forgive him for. Tying her to a tree was an unnecessary burst of theatrics.

A couple nitpicks: you overuse the italics in this. Some of the emphasis should be the readers' to add, by placing so many italics in there, it makes the words halting, almost jerky.

Also, it should be: “Can I help you with anything?” he asks. “Can I get you anything?” he offers.

anonymous July 5 2008, 06:10:32 UTC

I was sexually assaulted while in college, but I guess I reacted differently than a lot of young women. I went into full berserker mode on the guy trying to grab me, shrieked at him, swung a fist at his face (didn't connect) and then watched in amazement as he went running away in terror ( ... )