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Perhaps You Should Stay Undercover, Part 3

Aug 10, 2010 14:55

( Perhaps You Should Stay Undercover part 3 )

Comments 11

inthenameofjuc August 12 2010, 05:00:50 UTC

AWWWW, MITCH. I LOVED IT.

cross-gendered pornfiction....ryan ross is EVERYWHERE. in EVERY fandom....

Who knew Carden was such a sap? oh man, i love how you made it half in flashbacks. I think you transitioned very well between the two.

And i will love you forever for working in 'this is awkward, i gotta go'. GENIUS.

forevernew August 12 2010, 05:15:42 UTC

Yay! \o/

RYAN ROSS SEES ALL. FACT. (I'm sure he'd be horrified if he knew how much use people get out of his made-up term, but I'm kinda OK with that.)

Someone that obviously evil has to have a soft spot somewhere, man. I suspect there was much threatening of bandmates to prevent mockery. I am perhaps excessively fond of flashbacks, but the story would have been so boring had I told it linearly! It's possible I watched too many Tarantino movies growing up. But yay, thank you! I was hoping it wasn't too awkward, so that's nice to hear!

I had to include it! Mostly because wow, Joe Jonas, you fail interpersonal interactions forever. *pats him*

I'm so glad you liked it! \o/

shkmhlove August 13 2010, 00:58:18 UTC

I must say I have been looking forward to reading this since the stories were revealed in July..
And I must say it so lived up to everything and more.. :)
I just loved how Dani was the one that set Kevin and Mike up..
Gotta love Bill for telling Mike that he was dumb about everything..

forevernew August 13 2010, 01:25:51 UTC

Yay, I'm glad you liked it! I was so frustrated with this thing, heh.

solar_cat August 14 2010, 19:22:45 UTC

Wow, so I've had this tab open for a day and a half and just realized I hadn't actually commented yet. Oops? /0\

I really love the concept of this (why don't we have more Mike/Kevin/Danielle??), and the way you showed their different approaches to the triad relationship that none of them was expecting to have. Mike's jealousy in the last part was totally believable, and I liked that you showed that aspect as well as the times when the relationship was working without any problems.

Also, your characterization of William was wonderful!

forevernew August 15 2010, 01:07:46 UTC

Eee, thank you! I'm a sucker for triads, so I couldn't resist getting Dani involved. I'm considering writing a sequel set after the baby is born, just to see how that changes the relationship dynamic. *ponders*

Yay! He's so fun to write, man.

:-D wayfarersgirl August 16 2010, 03:31:15 UTC

I, too, *LOVED* Bill in this. He's one of my faaaaavorites to read (and write), and he was absolutely hilarious here!!! <333

Re: :-D forevernew August 16 2010, 22:02:15 UTC

I'm so glad! I think I worked harder on his characterisation than on anyone else's barring Mike. He's just so fun to write! :-D

agirlnamedfia August 16 2010, 19:15:58 UTC

That was adooooooooooooooorbs, Mitch. ADULTERY IN HIS HEART. :D <33333

forevernew August 16 2010, 23:05:05 UTC

I HAD TO KEEP THAT IN, IT WAS TOO PERFECT. I'm so glad you liked it! I love this story so much, man. \o/