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nyxlily

spn_dailylife challenge

Sep 07, 2007 18:28

Title: A Lesson in Stillness
Category: Gen
Rating: R (for language)
Word count: 1,510
Summary: Dean is dying, and Sam is being SO unhelpful. At least from Dean's POV.
A/N:
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supernatural fic, challenge

Comments 12

curtainpull September 8 2007, 14:41:50 UTC

Oh, I like this! Excellent idea, how the way they live, with the possibility of possesion and everything, could make it easy to misinterpret and misread each other, especially in a situation like this!

During that time Sam kept his hand on Dean's heart, counting out the beats and breathing in sync with his brother - rapid and shallow. It wasn't until the men pried him away that he realized that they were there, and learned that breathing in sync with someone with a chest wound was a bad idea when he found himself almost too dizzy to stand up.

Oh, Sam!

nyxlily September 9 2007, 01:56:47 UTC

Aw, thanks for reading and reviewing! It was fun writing this, so am glad you like it.

nativestar September 8 2007, 16:09:21 UTC

Oh Dean! I really liked both POV's. I always find it interesting how actions can be viewed so differently. Thanks for sharing!

nyxlily September 9 2007, 01:59:10 UTC

Thanks for reading! I really wanted to write the boys interpeting the same thing differently, and I wanted to whump Dean, thus the story was born. Or something. Anyway, thanks again!

girlfan1979 September 8 2007, 17:09:32 UTC

This is really cool.

Nice take on Dean being so far out of it, and the double POV worked well.

I especially liked the end, that hint of returning to a Winchester standard ratio of fuckedupness to okayness. Nicely done.

nyxlily September 9 2007, 02:02:34 UTC

I'm glad it worked. The boys are always so in tune with each other that the only way I could think of for them to have such different views was with one of them suffering and confused. And, well, gratuituous Dean whump! Who could resist?

lol, fuckedupness.. man, that should totally be added to the Winchester's Dictionary.

Thanks for reading/reviewing!

willoweese September 9 2007, 09:24:45 UTC

I really liked seeing the differing points of view here. It's so interesting to see how simple things we say and do every day can be taken out of context.

Nice job :)

nyxlily September 12 2007, 19:49:38 UTC

Thanks for reading/reviewing! It was a nice experiment and it was fun. I'm glad it worked out.

mgbutterfly September 10 2007, 00:05:35 UTC

Ooh, I really liked this. And I especially like the way Sam makes Dean be still. Silly Dean.

And it's probably a good idea for Sam to keep it all to himself. *g*

nyxlily September 12 2007, 19:56:06 UTC

I'm happy that you liked it! Silly Dean in all incarnation is always fun, to read and write :D Thanks for reading and commenting!