Loooooove the details of Sandra riding the bike, eating the popsicle, and the residents of the neighborhood. Also, the concepts of little kids being tamed as they get older and Liam's soul-reading, that was beautiful. The bit about killing Sandra was seriously a shock though, why did you put that there? (you don't have to say if it gives away more of the story, I was just wondering...)
well thats his job. he has to kill her to "get his wings". but as a writer, i'm trying to get the audience to fall in love with sandra. and we don't want her to die. but she must.
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Loooooove the details of Sandra riding the bike, eating the popsicle, and the residents of the neighborhood. Also, the concepts of little kids being tamed as they get older and Liam's soul-reading, that was beautiful. The bit about killing Sandra was seriously a shock though, why did you put that there? (you don't have to say if it gives away more of the story, I was just wondering...)
But yeah. I love it.
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but as a writer, i'm trying to get the audience to fall in love with sandra. and we don't want her to die. but she must.
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