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[nunchucker]

I'm not as good of a writer as I once was. Actually, I'm not as good at being creative as I once was. But! That is changing. I've realized that practice is the only thing that gave my stuff any kind of flair, as it was. That being said, I'm still writing scenes for a story that I still haven't completed

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[discuss_my_poop]

The conversations are too long.

I lked this part best: "Hey, it's educational. Tonight, I got to see how people look at you if you're a hermaphrodite."

[nunchucker]

I'm thinking that I might change the narrative to 3rd person: Omnipotent. That way, I can describe the conversations without using so much actual dialogue. Also, I'm missing something in the tone, I think.

[fantasticraig]

I would keep it the way it is, I think third person limited (or whatever the non-omnipotent one was called) works better for this. But I guess omnipotent would lessen the dialogue.

Limited, I think makes the reader feel more like an actual part of the story, rather than just an observer like omnipotent would.

[j_paris]

gabby and i approve: it is a good thing. we will watch for updates! i have no constructive criticism for you because my brain is waaay over...there.

[nunchucker]

I've since given this its first revision.