FIC: Venéra in Silence and Color
Title: Venéra in Silence and Color
Author: Valerie Vancollie
Characters: Megan, Larry, Don
Pairings: Megan/Larry
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 4888
Excerpt: Panic. Desperation. Cars. Cars whizzing past as she swerved and fought the wheel. Fought for control. Honks. Angry yells. Baby on board. Lights. The screech of tires.
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This is an excellently written, gripping story. The stream of consciousness motif worked well. Particularly Megan's increasingly disoriented thoughts.
I loved Don being "blue" to her, especially when she associated "Blue" with "Good and Safety". (Larry as "White" makes perfect sense.)
You also SCARED THE PEEWADDINs out of me. I actually had to skip to the end because I was so scared that you had killed Larry that I couldn't wait to find out.
Thank you for not killing Larry, by the way.
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I'm really glad the stream of consciousness has worked so well, I'm relieved. I was having doubts as I was rereading it just before posting. Sometimes it seems so clear to the author, who knows exactly what they want to be there, that we lose track of how the reader may view it.
Originally I hadn't intended to have the Don-blue thing but I was writing and colors appeared again (the original Venéra title was simply Venéra in Silence) that I realized there was a motif there and Don just got added with that.
Scared is good. It is meant to be angst and, as one of my friends knows only all too well, with my stories there are NEVER any guarantees. I'm not one of those authors who will always keep the central characters alive. Anyone can die in any fic. But not this one. That would have added a whole 'nother layer to it that I had neither the time nor the inclination to deal with here. Plus it didn't fit with the idea I had ( ... )
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