Comments | nos4a2no9: Two Trains, Running (Victoria, PG)

nos4a2no9

Two Trains, Running (Victoria, PG)

May 20, 2007 10:15

Title: Two Trains, Running
Characters: Victoria, mentions of Fraser/Victoria
Rating: PG
Word Count: 1089
Notes: For the lovely lipstickcat's Victoria Day Challenge. I had submitted this fic for beta last August but didn't feel confident posting it until now. Many thanks to mondschien for that ages-ago beta. Sorry it took so long to appear.
Summary: She spends ( Read more... )

my fic, writing stuff, fanfiction, due south stuff

Comments 20

lipstickcat May 20 2007, 17:44:51 UTC

Oh. That's just so amazing. So beautiful and painful, and the ending completely hit me like a sudden shock.

The stars were still bright in the first rosy blush of dawn, and she watched them spin overhead. Her eyes drifted closed, Ben’s heartbeat pulsing in her ears.

I really love that part, but all of it is so wonderfully written. I don't have the words for how much I love this.

Just.... wow

nos4a2no9 May 21 2007, 19:30:38 UTC

Thank you! And thanks for starting up this challenge - I really wanted to read some good Victoria fic and people really stepped up to the plate.

troyswann May 21 2007, 17:04:29 UTC

See? now you went and made me feel sorry for Victoria. :) No, that's not a fair accusation because I always kind of felt sorry for Victoria, but you made her beautiful.

The ending is, of course, wonderful.

nos4a2no9 May 21 2007, 19:32:44 UTC

Thanks! Victoria deserves a little sympathy, I think. And she's beautiful in her ugliness, if that makes sense. I'm very glad you liked the ending. Thank you for the great feedback.

lamentables May 21 2007, 20:27:21 UTC

Wow!

Such a strong sense of delirium and trying to lose herself, but then that last line changes everything and brings the world back into focus.

nos4a2no9 May 22 2007, 12:49:50 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad that last line worked - I thought it might be too much but it seemed like a logical way to end things.

ignazwisdom May 22 2007, 05:37:00 UTC

Oh, MAN, this killed me. Absolutely beautiful, as usual, and with such a wicked twist at the end.

I noticed one tiny typo: "half-light of early dawm." It's possible that I read things too closely.

nos4a2no9 May 22 2007, 12:51:20 UTC

Yay! I'm glad you liked it! And thanks very much for catching that typo - your mad close-reading skills remain unchallenged. *hugs*

_scally May 22 2007, 09:43:38 UTC

Very beautiful, unexpected ending...

TYK!

nos4a2no9 May 22 2007, 12:51:36 UTC

Thank you!