The second of my drabble challenge fanfics. This one's shorter then the last one but lengths may widely vary for all of them depending on how much I think needs to be written
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Ah, I know you, you're Seme-sama's [Moonstar102] best friend and a friend of Kyuu. Hi! *waves*
Very nicely written, I like how you kept Jou in character in both instances to show just how dynamic his character has been <3 Much envy for your ability to describe the action so well ^^ Wonderfully done.
Details are love though, and so long as they're crafted properly (which you managed to do quite well <3 ) the scenes can only benefit from the attention and develop nicely.
*Nods* You're right there. One of my old English teacher (I think...) though thought the opposite. They said to keep sentences short during action scenes to make them more intense and only go off into long detail in the calm scenes. Maybe I should reread some of my favourite books to see if that's true or not. :P
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Very nicely written, I like how you kept Jou in character in both instances to show just how dynamic his character has been <3 Much envy for your ability to describe the action so well ^^ Wonderfully done.
~YRE
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Thank you. ^^ I have this thing about paying too much attention to details so often I mess up action scenes by making them too boring. ^^;
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Details are love though, and so long as they're crafted properly (which you managed to do quite well <3 ) the scenes can only benefit from the attention and develop nicely.
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