LOM: Waking (R), Gen.

[laytoncolt]

Later, Gene will think it's odd the things people will ignore.

Comments

[missyheart2009]

Oh gosh. That's frightening sad. :( But I liked it. The way you had the events placed really got me to continue to the end.

[laytoncolt]

Thank you! :-)

[cribbins]

Wow, that's..a little bit terrifying and bleak, but beautifully written. I love the disjointed narrative.

[laytoncolt]

Thank you! :-)

[dorsetgirl]

That's a really interesting new view of the situation; I don't think I've ever seen Gene being pulled in to what Sam is experiencing before. That's a really neat way to present things.

"Do you?" Gene asks. "Do you believe in me?"

"I don't think I would still be here," [Sam] says, "if I didn't."

That's a nice insight into Sam's mind - he's sort of afraid that by believing that this is all real, he is keeping himself there, whereas if he went with "this is all a dream" he could get back. Nice analysis.

I like this - thank you and welcome to the comm!

[laytoncolt]

Thank you! I'm so glad to have found the comm, I missed out on the fandom the first time I watched the series. :-)

[treacletotty]

Wow I love this! :D

especially this little exchange:

"Your world," Gene says disbelievingly. "Then what the hell do you think this is?"

Sam shrugs, and won't quite meet his eyes. "I've kind of just been thinking of it as yours."

Gene refers to it as 'my kingdom', 'my city' and 'my team', he's very much the boss and in control, while Sam has been demoted and is stuck in a place that he really doesn't fit into. It's a world that Gene controls, not Sam, and I love how in-character that thought is.

sorry for long comment, heh. Loved the story~

[laytoncolt]

Thank you! :-)

[amproof]

Nice twist on the end. I really enjoyed this. Great job getting into Gene's head. It must be very difficult for him b/c as a cop he'll want to save people, and here he can't even save the guy standing next to him. Very intriguing insight there.

[laytoncolt]

Thank you! :-)