Never Trust Amber

[niravive]

So! I'm working on a new fic, as well as the drabble requests (Sara's is...long). This is a fairy tale, sort of. Well, it started as one. Who knows what it'll end up. Many thanks to cobe for naming one of the characters, and rapple for giving me name bases for another one.

Without further ado, the first part of Never Trust Amber. ^____^

Comments

[rappleart3]

I like the beginnings of this. It sounds really really interesting and I know I'm gonna enjoy this story.

However the one line sentences are a tad annoying. Even M falls into this. I know that you want to emphasize certain points, but combining some of the sentences into 1 paragraph won't hurt the story any.

That might just be a personal twitch though ^^;;

Still, very interesting ^_^ Maor please?

[niravive]

I like the one line paragraphs because I think it helps the pacing. It does something very specific, which is what I was going after here. And I am working on more. The wizard's apprentice has to show up, after all. ^___~

[tygati]

Aww, it's quite adorable. <3

[niravive]

Thank you! <3 <3

[dmlpacker]

More please? ^_^

[niravive]

Working on it! This and the drabble requests. <3 <3 <3