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FIC: A Willing Sacrifice Part 4

Nov 12, 2007 21:01

FIC: A Willing Sacrifice
Author: Nightrider
Fandom: The OC
Disclaimer: I don’t own anything related to the OC. How sad for me!
Summary: Seth begins to doubt his friendship with Ryan.
A/N: This was written for Brandy’s 15 minute challenge. I was supposed to use a sentence prompt, but it didn’t fit with the story I wrote. It’s rather odd ( Read more... )

ryan, oc, angst, cohens+1, willing sacrifice

Comments 33

teachertam November 13 2007, 02:51:57 UTC

Oh, wow. They *are* a bunch of morons! Yikes.

Poor Ryan. I just want to hug him.

:)

Which means that I really loved this chapter, too. Thank you!

nightrider101 November 13 2007, 02:56:45 UTC

I know! I was shocked by the extreme level of moron-ness I've been witnessing while writing this story. :)

Ryan... *sighs* He needs a hug. I'm sure he'll gladly accept one from you. :)

Thanks for responding! It's wonderful to hear from you.

teachertam November 13 2007, 03:49:31 UTC

It's wonderful to read another update from *you*! :)

I had to go reread your "consequences" story, right now, because I just loved that story. You did it so well.

I'm actually in the middle of writing a story from Brandy's most recent set of prompts, and I'm *aaaaaaaaaalmost* done. :)

I can't wait. But I'm nervous about posting it. Becuase it's pretty dark. *chews lip*

Anyway, I'm gonna go finish, now. It'll be up, tonight.

fifimom November 13 2007, 03:25:13 UTC

This is great but I have to admit you are kind of scaring me. Remember the rule, please. Thanks so much for the update, so looking forward to more.

nightrider101 November 13 2007, 20:15:09 UTC

LOL I've been reminded of the rule. ;) Don't worry though. I'm a sucker for a happy ending. I just have to drag everyone through the mud first. :)

60schic November 13 2007, 04:16:11 UTC

“I’m surprised you didn’t know considering Ryan was the one that picked him up from prison.”....Whoa! Did you just see my head spin around? I love how you followed this up with this: “You sure don’t know a lot about what goes on in your own house,” Riley responded flatly. Sandy, not one to ever back down, glared at the other man. Who the hell did this guy think he was?...obviously someone more attuned to picking up on unspoken language. Or one who actually cares to notice such things, you big moron!

Sandy felt his jaw tightened. The more he learned about what actually occurred at the convenience store, the more ill he felt....you should go with that feeling Sandy, and add in clueless and negligent. To be so worried about a frenetic Seth who is always frenetic is one thing---but then why not worry about a silent Ryan?

People in Newport were so predictable....or more precisely, 'The Cohen Parents'

This keeps on getting better and better, nightrider!

nightrider101 November 13 2007, 20:28:19 UTC

hehehe I love how you word things. ;) I can picture you yelling "You big moron" at your computer screen. I got a chuckle out of that.

Thanks for pointing out the fact that Ryan picked up Trey from prison. I was wondering if anyone was going to catch that.

LOL Yeah, the Cohen parents *are* predictable. Ryan told him what he wanted to hear and Sandy backed down. Moron... *sighs*

Thanks for the lovely feedback! It's always so nice to hear from you.

60schic November 13 2007, 20:31:50 UTC

Hee---I think I probably was yelling at my screen over that!

More moronic parenting to follow?

nightrider101 November 13 2007, 20:33:56 UTC

YAY for moronic parenting!! There will be an intervention... It just won't be the parental units that do it. I plan on making them look *really* bad. Just because I can... :) Thanks 60schic!

zbyszko November 13 2007, 04:36:54 UTC

I really like your Detective Riley. The Cohens continue to astound-so clueless...

nightrider101 November 13 2007, 20:29:32 UTC

I had a good time with Riley. :) I work, well, I *am* law enforcement so I've met quite a few good cops over the years. I figured I'd do the good ones some justice with this story since they usually get the short end of the stick. :) Thanks for the feedback!

fredsmith518 November 13 2007, 07:53:07 UTC

Goodness that was tense.
Very much like the detective Riley, well rounded oc.

nightrider101 November 13 2007, 20:30:39 UTC

I seem to be getting good at tense. I'm going to write myself a big, fat PWP or something once these angst-fest stories are over. :)

Thanks for the compliment on Riley. Law enforcement often gets written in a bad light. It was fun to do something different with this story.