Fic: Identity

[nighthawkms]

Title: Identity
Author: nighthawkms
Genre: Fluff!
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Some angst, bit of language
Chapter Pairing: Steve/Tony
Summary: Tony's been spending a lot of time in the lab with Iron Man lately... Steve's curious as to why.
Disclaimer: Characters are the property of Marvel and their respective creators. I don't own them, I'm just playing in the '

Comments

[illuminatius]

I just love reading dialogue fics. Especially if they're good. Like this one is. <3 Dialogue provides setting, and hilarity. Love it. Pure Vanilla Extract, lmao.

It's amazing how, despite time passing and him getting older and married, Spider-Man will always sound like a fifteen year old girl. Awesome.

[nighthawkms]

I'm glad you like it! And yeah, I picture Spider-man as this hyperactive twitchy guy, brilliant but constantly on way too much sugar. At least in the suit. Outside of it he seems a little calmer and controlled.

[mozzarellaroses]

..... I have this secret obsession with dialogue only fun fics :D I DON'T CARE IF MOST PEOPLE DON'T LIKE EM, I LOVE THE THINGS.

But only if they're fun and well-done. As this is ;) SO LOVE FOR THIS ONE. It was funny, fun, cheerful, and it had Spidey in it.

So all good on this front <3

[nighthawkms]

Yay! Glad you liked! :)

[valtyr]

It took me a couple of tries to get through, as I find the dialogue only format heavy going, but it's cute.

How do you feel about concrit?

[nighthawkms]

I am all for concrit, since I'm always trying to improve and especially in this fandom it's hard to keep track of every single continuity error. So basically concrit is awesome and well appreciated :)

[valtyr]

Okay, I hope you meant that as I have a bunch of thoughts. :)

Well, I don't dislike dialogue-only fics on principle or anything, but I felt it wasn't the best form for this fic. I'm generally very doubtful if such a fic is more than one scene. And there's parts where it doesn't work well. Like, it works well here:
“Sure. Improvements. To the suit.”

“Are those hand waggles supposed to mean anything?”As it's fun to picture what Spider-Man's doing with his hands. But sometimes characters basically narrate their actions - in particular, Spider-Man talking about pushing the intercom button, or Steve saying "Why did you want to meet me in Tony's lab". It just doesn't seem like something a person would naturally say, but it had to be crammed into the dialogue somewhere

[nighthawkms]

Thanks for the input! I can definitely understand the points you're making - the dialogue is definitely stilted in some parts and Spidey's protection of his identity makes sense. I'll keep this stuff in mind for any future fics, and thanks for taking the time to write all that out! =D

[clair3]

hahaha XD the convo cracked me up. good job!

[nighthawkms]

Glad you liked!

[dorothy1901]

This takes place pre-Tony's identity reveal, so I guess early Avengers era? Still trying to learn as much as possible about canon, so please forgive any egregious continuity errors and whatnot, though please tell me if I have any major canon errors so I'll know for next time!

The early Avengers didn't include Spider-Man. There was some minor interaction, but he didn't actually join the group until quite late in their history.

[dorothy1901]

More to the point, by the time Spider-Man joined the Avengers, Captain America (and everyone else) knew Iron Man was Tony Stark.

[nighthawkms]

Thanks for letting me know; someone mentioned this in a comment and I was trying to confirm it in the Marvel wiki but it wasn't clear. I'll change the setting to a random happenstance number-verse instead of 616 to reflect the continuity error :)