You write them heart-wrenchingly young here but oh so real, like people who live and breath and are not legends but ordinary, drawing upon the strength of youthful exuberance and suffocating under the oblivion of hurt that comes with absentee parents.
Your attention to detail is painting vivid scenes and three dimensional characters in this beautifully written beginning. Both boys are believably opening up to one another as their friendship grows and deepens. Your Uther is well drawn and melancholy. It's no wonder he pushes Arthur, he doesn't want his son to end up stuck like he is.
I loved this bit: Arthur denies himself a lot of things, but most of all he denies contemplating the start of school looming closer every day. He’s kept the training runs with Merlin to himself, moments he unfolds and studies in the dark with both hands fisted beneath his pillow. It’s like thinking about his mother: there are questions that cannot be answered in the light of day but only speculated on at night. There's already a feeling of loss at soon having to share Merlin with his team mates as soon as summer is over and that last paragraph highlighted the real reason he doesn't want to share Merlin at all
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Thank you so much. Those sentences you quoted were actually one of the first things I wrote. I just had this image of him feeling this way, and that's what led to everything else! I'm happy it caught your attention.
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I loved this bit: Arthur denies himself a lot of things, but most of all he denies contemplating the start of school looming closer every day. He’s kept the training runs with Merlin to himself, moments he unfolds and studies in the dark with both hands fisted beneath his pillow. It’s like thinking about his mother: there are questions that cannot be answered in the light of day but only speculated on at night. There's already a feeling of loss at soon having to share Merlin with his team mates as soon as summer is over and that last paragraph highlighted the real reason he doesn't want to share Merlin at all ( ... )
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