I don`t know why I had a picture of Lady Heather when you said that it wasn`t Blake, but I did. It would have to be a good nice surprise for that kind of a really big clifhanger. You`re a bad, bad person for leaving us to tremble in unticipation!
Poor Greg... But I do love dark stories. Just please don`t hurt him too much and make a happy ending. Please, please, please... *beggs on her knees*
Love the story so far, you made my day when I saw that there was a new instalment of it!
*extra shuffling* Well, I did get the bodyguard for a reason! It's not Lady Heather, I can confirm that, although good gosh that would have been a good plot twist...!
I'm not sure I can promise not hurting Greg too much, but I *can* promise that there's definitely no character death and the boys will recover (in the same way they seem to spring back from the really nasty episodes eventually). So I hope that's okay! ^^ I'm glad to hear you're enjoying it though, I was really worried over whether I should go the dark route or just continue on the vaguely dark but not unsafe route :D
it looks like you don't need a body guard LOL I"m glad but I'll do my job if necessary... and Greg in a heap of trouble is fine as long as he survives it ^_^ ...
Simply adorable!
anonymous
August 15 2010, 11:58:46 UTC
What I like a whole heap of bunches about this story over many others that would even feature Greg this way, is that you don't write Greg like a weakling damsel-character! ..., stupid and choiceless, needing to be fought for. He tried to defend someone else instead of needing to be defended - and with all that he could at that. While in persecution he offered someone else comfort, strength and encouragement while receiving it. He's not 'NEEDY' and without common sense. He's not written as a girl ... he's still a MAN for Pete's SAKE
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Re: Simply adorable!niceandfluffyAugust 16 2010, 11:50:02 UTC
Thanks very much! I know exactly what you mean, although I guess you can find something similar in most fanfics for how Greg is often portrayed - for the two fandoms I used to, or do, write in, LOTR had Legolas often portrayed as remarkably wimpy considering who he was, and in the X-men series I find that Gambit seems to often end up a victim more often than anyone else. Not that these are bad in any way, another way to view the character and to tell the story that the author wants to tell, but I do personally prefer to display the strength in someone in conjunction with whatever vulnerability they might have, if nothing more than it makes for a dramatic story
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Oh, I have dibs on someone!
anonymous
August 15 2010, 23:17:22 UTC
I. It would be just amazing if it was Simon Black! the other dom at the dominion! Now, I'm not getting my hopes up, but MAN-OH-MAN!
II. They had an intra-dermal tracker in Nicky and found him ... (had to try ... and fail, but nonetheless ...)
Note: It takes serious brain cells to utilize the CSI- 'analysis / evidence' methodology against them (the CSI's) and simultaneously as a weapon of control. I almost can't wait to meet the culprit - and ever qualified equal to both Grissom and Lady Heather combined. This is serious stuff.
One of the best lines: "Good rest was always so hard to come by." I said to myself: Nighty night, my sweet Nicky! Then I added: MY.POOR. NICKKKYYYY!!!!! ('fwuump' ... head-desk).
You said it and you proved true to it as well. The 'angst' level is going up many levels. The next installment can't come soon enough.
I have read this from start to now and my mind is mush. You write these characters in such a way as to be Real...they appear so in character that it makes it easy to fall into the story.
And then the way you write the group!kink in such a wonderfully expressive way...just....guh.
I love the sound of "guh!" in the morning! Although your poor eyes if you read it all in one or two sittings, I think its up to something ridiculously high for word count so far (140,000 words? Something like that)..
I'm really glad you're enjoying it, and I'm especially glad the characterisation is coming across well. I'm not American myself so I'm a little too conscious that some of them might drift into British if I'm not paying attention, but then again I guess the angst aspects might help out about that - if you're too busy focusing on the gun, the odd knickers here and there might be overlooked!
... okay, that was possibly one of the weirdest sentences I've typed recently...
Thanks very much for reading and I hope it continues to please!
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Glad you enjoyed it - it's likely to get darker in the next few chapters, but I promise there will be a flashlight available at some point!
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Poor Greg... But I do love dark stories. Just please don`t hurt him too much and make a happy ending. Please, please, please... *beggs on her knees*
Love the story so far, you made my day when I saw that there was a new instalment of it!
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I'm not sure I can promise not hurting Greg too much, but I *can* promise that there's definitely no character death and the boys will recover (in the same way they seem to spring back from the really nasty episodes eventually). So I hope that's okay! ^^ I'm glad to hear you're enjoying it though, I was really worried over whether I should go the dark route or just continue on the vaguely dark but not unsafe route :D
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II. They had an intra-dermal tracker in Nicky and found him ... (had to try ... and fail, but nonetheless ...)
Note: It takes serious brain cells to utilize the CSI- 'analysis / evidence' methodology against them (the CSI's) and simultaneously as a weapon of control. I almost can't wait to meet the culprit - and ever qualified equal to both Grissom and Lady Heather combined. This is serious stuff.
One of the best lines: "Good rest was always so hard to come by."
I said to myself: Nighty night, my sweet Nicky!
Then I added: MY.POOR. NICKKKYYYY!!!!! ('fwuump' ... head-desk).
You said it and you proved true to it as well. The 'angst' level is going up many levels. The next installment can't come soon enough.
Thank you for this one though. Very nicely done.
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I have read this from start to now and my mind is mush. You write these characters in such a way as to be Real...they appear so in character that it makes it easy to fall into the story.
And then the way you write the group!kink in such a wonderfully expressive way...just....guh.
~hugz~
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I'm really glad you're enjoying it, and I'm especially glad the characterisation is coming across well. I'm not American myself so I'm a little too conscious that some of them might drift into British if I'm not paying attention, but then again I guess the angst aspects might help out about that - if you're too busy focusing on the gun, the odd knickers here and there might be overlooked!
... okay, that was possibly one of the weirdest sentences I've typed recently...
Thanks very much for reading and I hope it continues to please!
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